Online Friend.

   I am a young student,I come from Guangzhou.It is an honor to present my writing.Here,I will describe my simple opinion about online friend.
    Nowadays,with the coming of internet,more and more people make online friend.First of all,online friend is a convenient thing.Because people is busy at the work.people have no free time to face to face communication.So,online friend becomes a very method.At the same time.Online friend can make different nationpeople at the internet communication.That promotes cultural enchange.I think that is a good thing.
     Of course,some people have different opinion.I respect everyone opinion.That is all of my opinion about online friend.Thank you for your time on reading.Hope you have a great day.

评分：第三档 13-18分

优点：
1. 作文基本完成了试题规定的任务，提及了有关在线朋友的基本观点。
2. 表达了一些关键内容要点，如在线交友的便利性和促进文化交流的作用。

不足之处：
1. 语法错误相对较多，影响了文章的清晰性。例如，"people is busy at the work"应改为"people are busy with work"。
2. 标点符号使用不够准确，例如，“同时”一段的句子需要更好的断句。
3. 词汇使用有些重复和单调，“online friend”多次重复使用，可以替换为“online friendships”或“connections with people online”。

建议：
1. 修正语法错误，加强主谓一致、时态等方面的学习。
2. 丰富词汇量，避免重复使用同一词汇，提供更多背景细节以增强文章的深度。
3. 改善标点符号和结构，使文章逻辑更为通顺连贯。

总体来说，本文传达了作者对在线朋友的简单观点，但需要改进语言表达的准确性和丰富性。