邮件介绍中国传统的节日

Dear John.
I am writing to tell you about a traditional Chinese festival the Chinese New Year. It is also known as the Spring Festival. In ancient times, there was a monster named Nian, Nian was a dangerous animal, and it ate humans, but Nian was afraid of red color. In order to drive away Nian, people put up red paper on their windows and doors. It also my favorite festival.We can do a lot of things during the holiday. It makes us happy.
First of all, during the Chinese New Year, family members will get together to enjoy many kinds of delicious foods. In addition, the Chinese New Year lasts for 15 days, we can meet a lot of friends, which enriches our social life. Last but not least, people will sing and dance and play games during the holiday.
I wish you and your family good health and happiness. I'm looking forward to your early reply.
Yours Like

After reviewing the email, I would place it in the **second档 (19-24分)** according to the provided criteria. Here is the evaluation:

1. **Content Understanding and Clarity**:
   - The email successfully introduces the Chinese New Year and explains the traditional story of Nian, which is an important cultural aspect.
   - It clearly conveys what activities people typically engage in during the festival: family gatherings, enjoying food, socializing with friends, and partaking in entertainment.
   - It ends with a warm wish and an invitation for a reply, which provides a complete structure.

2. **Language Use**:
   - The language is mostly clear and understandable. However, there are some grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
   
3. **Improvements Needed**:
   - **Grammar and Sentence Structure**: Some sentences could be more coherent or grammatically correct:
     - "In ancient times, there was a monster named Nian, Nian was a dangerous animal..." could be improved by splitting into two sentences or using a semicolon: "In ancient times, there was a monster named Nian; it was a dangerous animal..."
     - "It also my favorite festival." should be corrected to "It is also my favorite festival."
     - "In addition, the Chinese New Year lasts for 15 days, we can meet a lot of friends, which enriches our social life." This sentence could be split: "The Chinese New Year lasts for 15 days. During this time, we can meet many friends, enriching our social life."

   - **Punctuation and Spacing**:
     - Ensure that spaces follow punctuation marks, such as after periods and commas.
     - There is a missing space: "It also my favorite festival.We can do..."

4. **Suggestions**:
   - Consider varying sentence structures to enhance the narrative flow. Use conjunctions and transitional phrases for better coherence.
   - Check for minor typos and ensure that punctuation is consistently applied throughout the text.
   - Enhance the cultural explanation with more detail to provide a deeper understanding.

Overall, with minor adjustments and more careful proofreading, the email could potentially reach the first档.

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sophia168118 发表于 2024-10-24 21:36
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在评审了这封邮件后，我将其放在**第二档 (19-24分)**，根据提供的标准。以下是评估：

1. **内容理解与清晰度**：
   - 邮件成功地介绍了中国的新年，并解释了有关“年”兽的传统故事，这是一个重要的文化方面。
   - 清楚地传达了人们在节日期间通常从事的活动：家庭聚会、享受美食、与朋友社交和参加娱乐活动。
   - 以温暖的祝福和回复邀请结束，完成了完整的结构。

2. **语言使用**：
   - 语言大多清晰易懂。然而，存在一些语法错误和不够流畅的句子结构。

3. **需要改进之处**：
   - **语法和句子结构**：一些句子可以更加连贯或语法正确：
     - “In ancient times, there was a monster named Nian, Nian was a dangerous animal...”可以通过分成两句或使用分号来改善：“In ancient times, there was a monster named Nian; it was a dangerous animal...”
     - “It also my favorite festival.”应改为“It is also my favorite festival.”
     - “In addition, the Chinese New Year lasts for 15 days, we can meet a lot of friends, which enriches our social life.”该句可拆分为：“The Chinese New Year lasts for 15 days. During this time, we can meet many friends, enriching our social life.”

   - **标点和间距**：
     - 确保标点符号后面有空格，如句号和逗号之后。
     - 有一个缺失的空格：“It also my favorite festival.We can do...”

4. **建议**：
   - 考虑变换句子结构以增强叙述的流畅性。使用连接词和过渡短语以获得更好的连贯性。
   - 检查小错误并确保标点符号在整个文本中的一致应用。
   - 可以用更多细节来增强文化解释，以提供更深刻的理解。

总体而言，经过小的调整和更仔细的校对，这封邮件可能达到第一档。