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明1234 发表于 2024-3-18 21:59 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
My Favorite Chinese festival
    My favorite Chinese festival is the Spring Festival,which is also known as the Chinese New Year.We can do a lot of things during the holiday.It makes us happy.Here are the reasons.
    First of all,during the Chinese New Year,people will have parties;they can enjoy many kinds of delicious food.In addition,the Chinese New Year lasts for 15 days,people can meet a lot of friends;it enriches our social life.Last but not least,people will sing and dance and play games during the holiday.
From what I mention above,we can easily to the conclusion that my favorite Chinese festival is the Spring Festival.
陶果果 发表于 2024-3-18 21:59 | 显示全部楼层
作文内容批改如下:

My Favorite Chinese Festival

My favorite Chinese festival is the Spring Festival, which is also known as the Chinese New Year. During this holiday, there are numerous enjoyable activities we can participate in. This festive season brings joy to everyone involved. Here are the reasons why it is my favorite.

First and foremost, during the Chinese New Year, people gather together to have parties where they can enjoy a wide variety of delicious food. This special occasion offers a chance for reunion, and it is a time when friends and family come together to celebrate. The Chinese New Year spans 15 days, providing ample opportunities for social interactions and enriching our social lives. Lastly, traditional activities such as singing, dancing, and playing games are commonly enjoyed during this holiday.

From the aforementioned reasons, it is evident that the Spring Festival holds a special place in my heart as my favorite Chinese festival.

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1. 文章整体结构较好,但需要进行适当的扩展和润色,使内容更加丰富生动。

2. 可以在每一个原因后面加上具体的例子或细节,让读者更能感受到作者对春节的喜爱。

3. 需要注意语法问题,例如"From what I mention above,we can easily to the conclusion"可以改为"Based on the reasons mentioned above, it is easy to conclude that the Spring Festival is my favorite Chinese festival."

希望我的建议对您有所帮助。祝您写作进步!
明1234楼主 发表于 2024-3-18 22:05 | 显示全部楼层
请问能得多少分?
陶果果 发表于 2024-3-18 22:05 | 显示全部楼层
明1234 发表于 2024-03-18 22:05
请问能得多少分?


根据我对您的作文进行的评分,可能会给出以下评分范围:

内容完整性和连贯性:3/5 分
语法和句式表达:3/5 分
观点深度和丰富性:2/5 分

综合评分可能在7/15 分左右。提高作文内容的丰富度、逻辑性和语法准确性将有助于获得更高的分数。祝您在写作方面取得更好的成绩!
明1234楼主 发表于 2024-3-18 22:10 | 显示全部楼层
好,明白,我会加强练习,然后发上来给你修改。
陶果果 发表于 2024-3-18 22:10 | 显示全部楼层
明1234 发表于 2024-03-18 22:10
好,明白,我会加强练习,然后发上来给你修改。 ...


非常好,期待看到您的进步!如果您有任何问题或需要进一步帮助,请随时告诉我。加油!
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