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The Importance of Face-to-Face Friends
In today's world, with the development of science and technol ogy, more and more people are making friends online. While online friends can provide us with a sense of connection and s upport, I believe that face-to-face friends are more important.
One reason why face-to-face friends are more important is that they provide us with a deeper level of emotional support. When we are going throug h tough times, there is nothing quite like having a friend by ou r side to offer comfort and advice. While online friends can pr ovide support through messages and calls, it is not the same as having someone physically present. Another reason why face-to-face friends are more important is that they can provide us wit h practical help.
If we need help moving house or need someo ne to look after our pets while we are away, it is our face-to- face friends who are more likely to be able to help us out. In conclusion, while online friends can provide us with a sens e of connection and support, it is our face-to-face friends who provide us with deeper emotional support an d practical help. Therefore, I believe that face-to- face friends are more important.



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1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

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评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

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2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
语言运用较为准确、恰当

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
语法结构和词汇单调。
语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

明显遗漏内容要点
语法结构和词汇极单调
语言错误很多，严重影响理解

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The Importance of Face-to-Face Friends

In today's world, with the development of science and technology, more and more people are making friends online. While online friends can provide us with a sense of connection and support, I believe that face-to-face friends are more important.

One reason why face-to-face friends are more important is that they provide us with a deeper level of emotional support. When we are going through tough times, there is nothing quite like having a friend by our side to offer comfort and advice. While online friends can provide support through messages and calls, it is not the same as having someone physically present. Another reason why face-to-face friends are more important is that they can provide us with practical help. If we need help moving house or need someone to look after our pets while we are away, it is our face-to-face friends who are more likely to be able to help us out.

In conclusion, while online friends can provide us with a sense of connection and support, it is our face-to-face friends who provide us with deeper emotional support and practical help. Therefore, I believe that face-to-face friends are more important.

评分：7/10

评语：这篇作文表达了作者对面对面朋友的重要性的观点，论述清晰，结构合理。但是，文章的论证部分可以进一步加强，通过提供更多具体的例子或实证来支持观点。加入一些适当的转折句和过渡词能够提升文章的连贯性和流畅度。此外，注意拼写和语法错误会有助于提高整体的语言准确性和质量。