作文批改与评分

                                  Protection of Environment
  There are still many problems of environmental protection in recent years. One of the most serious problems is the serious pollution of air, water and soil. The polluted air does great harm to people’ s health. The polluted water causes diseases and death. What’ s more, vegetation has been greatly reduced with rapid growth of modern cities.
To protect the environment, governments of many countries have done a lot actions.such as legislative steps have been introduced to control air pollution, to protect the forest and sea resources and to stop any environmental pollution. Therefore, governments are playing the most important role in the environment protection today. In my opinion, to protect environment, the government must take even more concrete measures. Firstly, it should let people fully realize the importance of environment protection through education. Secondly, much more efforts should be made to put the pollution. Finally, those who destroy the environment intentionally should be severely punished.
In a word, we should let them know that destroying environment means destroying mankind themselves.

下面是给这篇作文的批改与评分：

首先，作者在文章开头提出了环境保护问题的背景和重要性。然而，在整个文章中，作者没有展开论述这些问题，缺乏具体的例子和支持材料。建议作者在每个问题上提供更多的细节和数据来支持观点。

此外，文章中的语法错误较多，包括动词时态、主谓一致、代词使用等问题。建议作者在写作过程中更加注意语法细节，尤其是对于名词和动词的正确使用。

另外一个问题是结构和组织。文章只有一个段落，没有明确的段落分隔和引导。建议作者将文章分为引言、主体和结论三个部分，并在每个部分之间使用合适的过渡句，使文章更加清晰和连贯。

最后，作者的观点不够深入和详细。虽然提到了政府在环境保护中扮演重要角色，但没有具体说明政府应该采取哪些措施来解决环境问题。建议作者在给出观点的同时，提供相关的解决方案或建议，以增强文章的可信度和说服力。

总体而言，这篇作文在内容和语言上还有进一步改进的空间。如果按照上述建议进行修改，它将对环境保护问题的讨论更加全面和深入。在现有的写作水平下，我会给这篇作文打7分（满分10分）。