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When it comes to green transportation, everyone has his or her own idea. From my point of view, green transportation means eco-friendly. The reasons are as follows.
There are mainly two reasons for my opinion. On the one hand, choosing transportation ways will decrease environmental pollution. Different tranportations will bring different environmental pollution and air pollution. For example, cars can bring gas harmful to our air and sky. On the other hand, green transportation ways have a lot of choices, for example, by bike, by bus and running. From my point of choice, I go to school on foot every day. Because it benefits our living environment.
To sum up, green transport is very important that we can together make errors to choose green transportation ways. Along we can do so little, together we can do so much.


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When it comes to green transportation, everyone has his or her own idea. From my point of view, green transportation means being eco-friendly. The reasons for my opinion are as follows.

There are mainly two reasons to support my opinion. On the one hand, choosing sustainable transportation methods can help reduce environmental pollution. Different modes of transportation have varying degrees of impact on the environment and air quality. For example, cars emit harmful gases that pollute our air and contribute to climate change. On the other hand, green transportation offers a wide range of choices, such as biking, taking the bus, or even walking. In my case, I choose to walk to school every day because it not only benefits our living environment, but also promotes a healthy lifestyle.

In conclusion, green transportation is of great importance, and we should all make efforts to choose eco-friendly transportation methods. Although individual actions may seem insignificant, when we come together, we can make a significant impact on the environment.

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