作文修改与评分

Recently more and more people are talking about learning english.from my perspective,i like learning english very much,but I have the following difficulties in learning english need to solve.

The first point that I want to mention is that i think my english environment are not so good,and that is because to be a good english speaker，the environment are very important.What is more, it’s easier for me to understand that I can read more words in my spare time，write more and listen more,watch some english films,which is because it is good for learning english make good use of spare time.

From what i mentioed above,we can easily come to the conclusion that if i want to learn english well,i need a good english environment and make good use of spare time.

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
语言运用较为准确、恰当

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
语法结构和词汇单调。
语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

明显遗漏内容要点
语法结构和词汇极单调
语言错误很多，严重影响理解

zuo0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

From my perspective, I like learning English very much, but I have encountered some difficulties that need to be addressed. The first point that I want to mention is that I think my English environment is not very good. To become a good English speaker, having a good English environment is crucial. Additionally, I find that reading more words in my spare time, writing more, listening more, and watching English films can be helpful for improving my English skills. Therefore, making good use of my spare time is also important for learning English well.

Overall, this essay addresses the topic and includes the required content points. However, there are some improvements that can be made.

Firstly, the essay lacks a clear introduction. It would be better to include an opening sentence that introduces the topic and provides some background information about the importance of learning English.

Secondly, the essay could benefit from better organization and structure. It would be helpful to divide the essay into paragraphs to separate the different points being made. For example, one paragraph could focus on the importance of a good English environment, and another paragraph could discuss the benefits of reading, writing, listening, and watching English films.

Thirdly, the language usage in the essay is generally understandable but could be improved. There are some grammatical errors and instances where words are not used correctly. It would be beneficial to revise the sentences for clarity and accuracy.

In terms of scoring, I would rate this essay in the third category (13-18 points). It sufficiently addresses the main points, demonstrates a basic understanding of the topic, and uses some appropriate language. However, there are areas for improvement in terms of organization, language usage, and clarity.