作文批改并评分

作文内容：


Spring is Coming
    Recently, more and more people talking about Spring is Coming. From my perspective, it is totally undoubted about  spring is the most beautiful season of the year. The reasons why I believe so listed as below.
The first reason that I want to mention is that spring is a beautiful and comfortable season, and that  is because the flowers are coming out , the weather is getting warmer . What is more, it is easier for us to understand that we can spent more time with my family and friends in spring.
    From what I mention above, we can easily come to the conclusion that spring is the most beautiful season of the year. After all ,spring is a beautiful and comfortable season.

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
• 语言运用较为准确、恰当
  

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
• 语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解
  

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

• 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
• 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
• 存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解
  

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

• 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇单调。
• 语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解
  

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

• 明显遗漏内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇极单调
• 语言错误很多，严重影响理解
  

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

作文批改如下：

Spring is Coming

Recently, more and more people are talking about Spring is Coming. From my perspective, it is undeniable that spring is the most beautiful season of the year. The reasons why I believe so are listed below.

The first reason that I want to mention is that spring is a beautiful and comfortable season because the flowers start blooming and the weather becomes warmer. Furthermore, it is easier for us to understand that we can spend more time with our family and friends in spring.

From what I mentioned above, we can easily come to the conclusion that spring is the most beautiful season of the year. After all, spring is a beautiful and comfortable season.

评分和指导意见如下：

总体印象： 第二档 19-24分 完成了试题规定的任务，清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点，运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求，语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解。

评分依据：文章能够清楚地表达出作者认为春天是最美丽的季节，并给出了两个原因来支持这个观点。语言表达简单明了，符合题目要求。

修改建议：
1. "talking about Spring is Coming" 修改为 "talking about the coming of Spring"，更准确地表达。
2. "undoubted" 修改为 "undeniable"，更准确地表达。
3. "that is because" 修改为 "because"，去掉多余的修饰词。
4. "we can spent" 修改为 "we can spend"，谓语动词使用第一人称复数形式。
5. 建议在文章最后加上一个总结性的句子来强调观点。

修改后的作文如下：

Spring is Coming

Recently, more and more people are talking about the coming of Spring. From my perspective, it is undeniable that spring is the most beautiful season of the year. The reasons why I believe so are listed below.

The first reason that I want to mention is that spring is a beautiful and comfortable season because the flowers start blooming and the weather becomes warmer. Furthermore, it is easier for us to understand that we can spend more time with our family and friends in spring.

In conclusion, spring is undeniably the most beautiful season of the year. It brings us the beauty of blooming flowers and the warmth of the sun, as well as the opportunity to spend quality time with our loved ones.

评分：22分