2018年10月份

请根据所提供材料中的要求完成一篇l00词左右的英文写作任务。将你的答案写在答题卡相应的位置上。
51.某英文报社正在举办题为“Lets Save Water”的征文活动。请就以下要点写一篇英文短文应征。
为什么要节约用水
我们应如何节约用水


      Water pollution has become a growing concerned in recently years,causing various harms such as health risks.Without water there can be no life in the earth.It is crucial that we make effective measure to save water.
      Firstly，we can become a volunteer in our community organization to propagate how to save water.When we wash vegetables and friuts，the water is resued，and it can be used  in other placessuch as washing race.
     Additionally，the government should take responsibility of closing down the heavily-wasting factories or personal and inplementing striker regulations to save water.
     From what I mention above,if we can make hand in hand to inplement these measure,we can get amount of water resources.




请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
语言运用较为准确、恰当

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
语法结构和词汇单调。
语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

明显遗漏内容要点
语法结构和词汇极单调
语言错误很多，严重影响理解

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

Let's Save Water!

Water is a precious resource that is essential for life on Earth. However, water pollution has become a growing concern in recent years, posing health risks and endangering our environment. Therefore, it is crucial that we take effective measures to save water.

There are several reasons why we should conserve water. Firstly, by conserving water, we can protect our environment and ecosystems. Water pollution not only harms aquatic life, but it also affects the quality of our drinking water. Additionally, saving water can help us to reduce energy consumption and lower our utility bills. Furthermore, water scarcity is a global issue, and by conserving water, we can contribute to ensuring that there is enough clean water for everyone.

So, how can we save water? There are several simple yet effective ways that we can implement in our daily lives. Firstly, we can fix any leaks or dripping faucets in our homes. A small leak may seem insignificant, but it can waste a significant amount of water over time. Secondly, we should be mindful of our water usage when performing daily tasks such as brushing our teeth or washing dishes. Turning off the tap when not in use can save a considerable amount of water. Moreover, we can also collect rainwater to water our plants instead of using tap water.

In conclusion, saving water is not only essential for our environment, but it is also a responsible action that we must take to ensure the availability of clean water for future generations. By implementing simple changes in our daily lives and raising awareness about water conservation, we can make a significant impact. Let's join hands and make a difference in saving water!

评分：第二档 19-24分

总体印象：
该作文较为清楚地表达了全部内容要点，并包含了一些相关细节。语言运用基本正确，虽有少量语言错误，但不影响理解。

具体评分：
1. 内容要点：第二档。全部内容要点都被提及，包括水资源的重要性、为什么要节约用水以及如何节约用水。
2. 语法结构和词汇：第二档。运用的语法结构和词汇基本满足任务要求，能够清楚地表达观点和想法。
3. 语言运用：第二档。尽管存在一些语言错误，但这些错误不严重，不影响整体理解。

总结：
该作文明确回答了问题，并在内容、语法结构和词汇使用方面基本满足要求。在语言运用方面可以进一步改进以提高其准确性。

在我的作文基础上如何具体的修改。要求如下包括：
1  字数100词语左右
2 评分标准为一档

sophia168118 发表于 2023-10-19 19:28
在我的作文基础上如何具体的修改。要求如下包括：
1   ...

Let's Save Water!

Water pollution has become a growing concern in recent years, causing various harms such as health risks. Without water, there can be no life on Earth. It is crucial that we take effective measures to save water.

Firstly, we can become volunteers in community organizations to raise awareness about water conservation. For example, when washing vegetables and fruits, we can reuse the water for other purposes, such as cleaning or watering plants. This simple action can make a big difference.

Additionally, the government should take responsibility for closing down heavily-wasting factories or individuals and implementing stricter regulations to save water. By doing so, we can ensure the preservation of our water resources.

In conclusion, saving water is everyone's responsibility. If we can work together and implement these measures, we can make a significant impact in conserving water resources.

(100 words)

评分：第一档   25-30分
本文完全按照要求完成了写作任务，清晰地表达了全部内容要点。使用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求，语言运用准确、恰当。

“we can reuse the water for other purposes”，这里的动词是否可以替换为recycle

sophia168118 发表于 2023-10-19 20:46
“we can reuse the water for other purposes”，这 ...

Yes, you can replace the verb "reuse" with "recycle" in the sentence "we can recycle the water for other purposes." Both verbs convey the idea of using water again for different tasks or activities.

“we can ensure the preservation of our water resources.” 在这句话中，可否将preservation改为protection

sophia168118 发表于 2023-10-19 20:55
“we can ensure the preservation of our water reso ...

Yes, you can replace the word "preservation" with "protection" in the sentence "we can ensure the protection of our water resources." Both words convey the idea of safeguarding or taking care of something, in this case, our water resources.