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Nowadays,modern people put entertainment in a more and more important status,they have a varies ways of entertainment.such as singing KTV with friends, go hiking with family remembers,reading English books and so on. From me perspective,it is totally udoubted that the go hiking is my favorite entertainment.the reasons why I believe so are lited as below.                    
The first piont that I want to mention is that I like breathe the fresh air outside,and that is because the fresh air can make me ralax. What is more,it is easier for us to understand the go hiking can make me happy.which is bacause when I am attracted by the nature , my boring will go with the wind.
From what I mention above, we can easily come to the conclusion that the go hiking is my favorite entertainment. After all,I can breathe fresh air and make me get happiness.

批改如下：

现在，现代人把娱乐放在越来越重要的地位，他们有各种各样的娱乐方式，例如和朋友一起唱KTV，和家人去徒步旅行，读英语书等等。从我的角度来看，毫无疑问，徒步旅行是我最喜欢的娱乐方式。以下是我相信的原因。

我想要提到的第一个点是我喜欢呼吸新鲜空气，因为新鲜空气可以让我放松。更重要的是，我们很容易理解徒步旅行可以让我感到快乐。这是因为当我被大自然所吸引时，我的无聊会随风而去。

通过以上所提到的，我们可以轻易地得出结论：徒步旅行是我最喜欢的娱乐方式。毕竟，我可以呼吸新鲜空气并获得快乐。

批改意见：
1. 语法错误较多，需要注意单词拼写和句子结构。
2. 语言表达较简单，可以尝试使用更多的连接词和高级词汇，使文章更加生动有趣。
3. 文章需要添加一些实际例子或细节来支持和证明自己的观点，更能让人信服。