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Nowadays,modern people put entertainment in a more and more important status,they have a varies ways of entertainment.such as singing KTV with friends, go hiking with family remembers,reading English books and so on. From me perspective,it is totally udoubted that the go hiking is my favorite entertainment.the reasons why I believe so are lited as below.                    
The first piont that I want to mention is that I like breathe the fresh air outside,and that is because the fresh air can make me ralax. What is more,it is easier for us to understand the go hiking can make me happy.which is bacause when I am attracted by the nature , my boring will go with the wind.
From what I mention above, we can easily come to the conclusion that the go hiking is my favorite entertainment. After all,I can breathe fresh air and make me get happiness.

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Nowadays, modern people place a great importance on entertainment and have various ways to entertain themselves, such as singing KTV with friends, going hiking with family members, reading English books, and so on. From my perspective, it is unquestionable that my favorite form of entertainment is hiking. The reasons for my belief are listed below.

Firstly, I enjoy breathing in the fresh air while hiking, as it helps me relax. Additionally, hiking allows me to appreciate the beauty of nature, which helps to alleviate my boredom and make me happy.

In conclusion, based on the reasons mentioned above, it is clear that hiking is my preferred means of entertainment, as it enables me to breathe in fresh air and find joy in admiring the natural environment.

修改建议：

- 在段落之间加上空行，让文章更易读。
- 删除开头的“it is totally undoubted”，因为这表达过于绕口且啰嗦。
- 调整语序和语法错误，使句子更加流畅和准确。
- 在结论中再次重申自己的立场，以强调主题。

       Nowadays，modern people place a great importance on entertainment and have various ways to entertain themselves，such as singing KTV with friends, go hiking with family remembers,reading English books and so on.
From my perspective,the go hiking is my favorite entertainment.the reasons why I believe so are lited as below.                    
      Firstly, I want to mention is that I enjoy breathing in the air while hiking,and that is because it can make me relax. Secondly,the go hiking can make me happy.which is bacause when I am attracted by the nature , my boring will go with the wind.
     From what I mention above, we can easily come to the conclusion that the go hiking is my favorite entertainment. After all,it can make  me to breathe fresh air and make me get happiness.这样修改了一下，可以吗

有些许进步，但仍有需要改进的地方。修改建议如下：

现代人越来越看重娱乐，在众多的娱乐方式中，比如与朋友去唱KTV、和家人一起去爬山、读英文书等等，从我个人的看法而言，爬山是我最喜欢的娱乐方式，以下是我这样认为的原因：

首先，我喜欢在爬山时呼吸新鲜空气，这可以让我很放松。其次，当我沉浸在自然环境中时，可以感受到自然之美，从而抚平我内心的无聊和烦闷。

综上所述，可以很明显地看出，爬山是我最喜欢的娱乐方式。总之，它能让我呼吸新鲜空气并获得快乐。

修改建议：

- 开头首先要用简单的句子引出文章主题。
- 表述观点时要准确清晰，尽量避免模棱两可。
- 句子之间要注意连接和过渡词的使用，使文章会更加流畅自然。
- 在结论处要再次概括自己的观点，并强调主题内容。

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Modern people place great importance on entertainment and have various ways to entertain themselves, such as singing KTV with friends, going hiking with family members, reading English books, and more. In my perspective, hiking is my favorite form of entertainment for the following reasons. First, I enjoy breathing in fresh air while hiking, which helps me feel relaxed. Second, being surrounded by nature during a hike provides a sense of happiness that helps alleviate any boredom I may be feeling. In conclusion, it's clear that hiking is my preferred form of entertainment as it allows me to breathe fresh air and find joy in nature. For improvement, it's important to start with a clear and concise introduction, express viewpoints clearly with relevant supporting details, and use transition words effectively to connect ideas and make the text flow smoothly. Finally, it's crucial to restate the main idea in the conclusion and emphasize the theme for good overall coherence.