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Technology in the home
With the rapid growth of the national economy,technology has become more and more important in our daily life.Not only it is beneficial for us to save time,but also it brings great convenience to us as well.

As far as i am concerned,There are at least two aspects that i want to say artificial intelligence has become more useful.First of all,what's worth mentioning that it can wake up us in the moring which will contribute to lots of time.Another element i must point out here is that it is more convenience and help to us develop a good habit in our life.

All in all,artificial intelligence is more useful and effective.However we should appreciate the great contribution made by it,and at the same time pay enough attention to the problem caused by it.

这篇作文整体来看，有一些语法和表达上的问题。具体来说：

1. 第一句话的“become more and more important in our daily life”中，important应该改为an important role，或者是important factor。
2. 第二段中，“at least two aspects that i want to say artificial intelligence has become more useful”这句话可以改为“At least two aspects demonstrate the usefulness of artificial intelligence, which I would like to discuss below.”这样更符合英语表达的习惯。
3. 第二段第二句话中，morning拼写错误，应该为“it can wake us up in the morning”
4. 第二段最后一句话，应该用“helps us to develop good habits”，而不是“help to us develop a good habit”。
5. 最后一句话可继续完善，例如：“In conclusion, while we should appreciate the significant contribution made by artificial intelligence, it is also important to address the potential problems it may bring.”

总体来说，这篇作文表达出了科技在日常生活中的重要性，但是需要注意一些语法和表述上的问题。评分为70分左右。