批改：
Do you have an unforgettable day? If you ask me, my answer is yes.
My father took me to the park and we drove a car to celebrate my birthday. I saw a beautiful scene - the sky was blue and the leaves on the trees had turned green. The sun was shining brightly and the air was so fresh. Since my birthday falls in spring, it was a very nice season to celebrate in.
In the afternoon, we went back home and my father bought me some food and orange juice. Overall, I think my birthday was very happy. What do you think?
修改意见：
1. 第一句话的拼写： Do you 改为 Did you，因为主语是第二人称单数，而答案中用了过去时。
2. 省略掉原文中的一个冠词：a car -> car。在这个句子里“car”是限定词和名词一起表达的，用不着再加一个冠词。
3. 把两个简单句子合并成一个复合句子：My father took me to the park. We drove a car to celebrate my birthday. -> My father took me to the park and we drove a car to celebrate my birthday.
4. 对“picture”进行修改成“scene”，因为描述的是整个风景，而不是一幅画。
5. 把最后一句话改为陈述语序，也就是把“Do you think so?"换成“What do you think?" |
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