4.12作文 难忘的一天+请批改作文

An Unforgettable Day
Last Saturday, the sun was shining, my children and I went to the countryside to play, the scenery is beautiful all the way, we talked and laughed very happy. After playing for a long time, we all felt a little tired and sat on the river to rest. Then we saw a man with a net standing in the river. We all thought he was fishing, so we stood up and stopped him. My son said to my uncle, "No fishing here, you see there are no fishing signs on the river." The man turned and smiled and said, I am not fishing, I am picking up garbage in the water, the son felt a little shy.
Indeed, it is everyone's responsibility to protect the environment, and the son has done a great job. There is a sense of protecting the environment from childhood.
This day is unforgettable.

批改如下：

难忘的一天

上周六，阳光灿烂，我和孩子们到乡村玩耍，一路上风景优美，我们谈笑风生很开心。玩了很长时间后，大家感到有些累了，便坐在河边休息。这时，我们看到一个人拿着渔网站在河里，我们都以为他在钓鱼，于是走上前去制止他。我儿子对他说：“这里不能钓鱼，你看河里没有钓鱼的标志。”那个人转过身微笑着说：“我不是在钓鱼，我在清理水中的垃圾。”儿子感到有些害羞。

确实，保护环境是每个人的责任，而儿子做得非常好。从小就有一种保护环境的意识。

这一天是难以忘怀的。

批改意见：

1.文章描述了一个愉快的周末，但表达上过于简单，可以尝试用更多的描写和比喻来增强文章的吸引力。

2.第三段的表达存在一些问题。建议修改为：“确实，保护环境是每个人的责任，儿子做得非常好。他从小就有一种保护环境的意识。”

3.文章没有明确点明难忘的事情，可以在结尾时点明这个人物为令这个周末难忘的原因。

4.建议检查文章使用的时态是否一致，以及存在的错误拼写或语法问题。