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陈伟 发表于 2023-4-10 15:42 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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With the dovelopment of the social.More and more peope are looking forward to healthy lifestyle. If you ask me which one is better, I would like to tell you some benfits about bicycle.
Fistly, the bicycle is good for your body.If i have liesure time, I wil invite my friends go biking. when I take bike,I breath the fresh air around me and the feeling  of boring go away.
Secondly, the bicycle is very cheap, because you only prepare  abike and some food in need
Thirdly,the autivity of bicycle,not only excerise your body.
but also can make you feel relex 。I hope you can becoming a partment of us. you wil gain the sense of achievement and love it forever。
admin 发表于 2023-4-10 15:43 | 显示全部楼层
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With the dovelopment of the social.More and more peope are looking forward to healthy lifestyle. If you ask me which one is better, I would like to tell you some benfits about bicycle. Fistly, the bi  详情 回复 发表于 2023-4-10 15:44
陈伟楼主 发表于 2023-4-10 15:43 | 显示全部楼层

With the dovelopment of the social.More and more peope are looking forward to healthy lifestyle. If you ask me which one is better, I would like to tell you some benfits about bicycle.
Fistly, the bicycle is good for your body.If i have liesure time, I wil invite my friends go biking. when I take bike,I breath the fresh air around me and the feeling  of boring go away.
Secondly, the bicycle is very cheap, because you only prepare  abike and some food in need
Thirdly,the autivity of bicycle,not only excerise your body.
but also can make you feel relex 。I hope you can becoming a partment of us. you wil gain the sense of achievement and love it forever。
陈伟楼主 发表于 2023-4-10 15:44 | 显示全部楼层
admin 发表于 2023-4-10 15:43
很抱歉,您并未给出作文的具体内容。请您提供作文内容后,我将会尽可能地帮助您批改。 ...


With the dovelopment of the social.More and more peope are looking forward to healthy lifestyle. If you ask me which one is better, I would like to tell you some benfits about bicycle.
Fistly, the bicycle is good for your body.If i have liesure time, I wil invite my friends go biking. when I take bike,I breath the fresh air around me and the feeling  of boring go away.
Secondly, the bicycle is very cheap, because you only prepare  abike and some food in need
Thirdly,the autivity of bicycle,not only excerise your body.
but also can make you feel relex 。I hope you can becoming a partment of us. you wil gain the sense of achievement and love it forever。
admin 发表于 2023-4-10 15:44 | 显示全部楼层
以下是修改后的作文:

With the development of society, more and more people are looking forward to a healthy lifestyle. If you ask me which one is better, I would like to tell you about the benefits of bicycling.

Firstly, bicycling is good for your body. Whenever I have leisure time, I invite my friends to go bicycling. When I ride my bike, I breathe in the fresh air around me and the feeling of boredom goes away.

Secondly, bicycling is very affordable since you only need to prepare your bike and some food. You don't have to spend a lot of money to keep up with this activity.

Thirdly, bicycling is not only an exercise for your body but also allows you to relax. It's a great way to relieve stress and clear your mind.

I hope that you will become a part of our group. By doing so, you will gain a sense of achievement and love cycling forever.

Overall, your essay is well-written, but there are some minor grammatical errors and typos that need to be corrected. Here are some suggestions for improvement:

1. "dovelopment" should be "development".
2. "peope" should be "people".
3. "benfits" should be "benefits".
4. "Fistly" should be "Firstly".
5. "liesure" should be "leisure".
6. "when I take bike" should be "when I ride my bike".
7. "of boring go away" should be "of boredom going away".
8. "abike" should be "a bike".
9. "the autivity of bicycle" should be "the activity of bicycling".
10. "feel relex" should be "feel relaxed".
11. "partment" should be "part of".
12. "you wil gain" should be "you will gain".
admin 发表于 2023-4-10 15:45 | 显示全部楼层
批改如下:

With the development of society, more and more people are looking for a healthy lifestyle. If you ask me which is better, I would like to tell you about the benefits of bicycles.

Firstly, cycling is good for your body. Whenever I have leisure time, I invite my friends to go biking. When I ride my bike, I breathe in the fresh air around me, and the feeling of boredom goes away.

Secondly, cycling is a very cheap activity because all you need is a bike and some food. Unlike other exercise activities that require gym memberships or expensive equipment, cycling is affordable for most people.

Thirdly, cycling not only exercises your body but also helps you feel relaxed. It is such an enjoyable experience that you forget you're actually working hard.

In conclusion, I hope you will consider joining us in cycling. You will gain a sense of achievement and enjoy it forever.

总评:此文在语法和单词拼写上都有一些错误,建议在写作前审查自己的作品。此外,文章中应该加入更多细节和例子来支持作者的观点。
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