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E-books or Paper-books
Nowadays,E-books are becoming more and more popular.E-books and Paper-books both have their own advantages;so,which one is better ?in my poinion ,I perfer paper-books.
First of all ,paper-books protect our eyes from blue light. Do not cause vision loss. In  addition ,paper-books  can  make our minds calm down from the influence of the Internet. So I have more time read paper-books.Last but not least ,Paper-books can not only make notes in books,but also save them by flipping through paper-books at any time.
As far as ,I am concerned,paper-books  are more inportant.I can’t live without paper-books.

批改如下：

E-books or Paper-books

Nowadays, E-books are becoming more and more popular. Both E-books and Paper-books have their own advantages, so which one is better? In my opinion, I prefer paper-books.

First of all, paper-books can protect our eyes from blue light and do not cause vision loss. In addition, paper-books can help calm our minds down from the influence of the internet, which means that we have more time to read paper-books. Lastly, paper-books allow us to make notes in them and save these notes by flipping through the pages at any time.

As far as I am concerned, paper-books are more important. I can't live without them.

批改意见：

1. 首句中的“in my poinion”应改为“in my opinion”。

2. 第一段中，可以加入一些统计数字或者研究结果来支持你对纸质书籍的喜爱。

3. 第二段中，“help calm our minds down”这个表达可以更加具体明了，比如可以说纸质书籍能让我们更专注于阅读。

4. 最后一段可以再进一步扩展，比如说为什么你会觉得纸质书籍更加重要，可以举例说明一下。

admin 发表于 2023-3-30 15:49
批改如下：

E-books or Paper-books

好滴，感谢

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