It is univerlly acknowledged that piaying sports is very important in our lives in this day and age.some people like dancing,some people like runing.As for me,I like sport is playing football.Here are the resons.
First and foremost,playing football can reduce pressure.In addition,playing football can build up body.everyone want to live healthy in the world.last but not least,playing football can make many friends which enrich my social life.
As a result,as far as I am concerning,playing football is best my like.
不足之处:
1. 语言表达不够清晰,语法错误较多,如“universlly acknowledged”应为“universally acknowledged”,“piaying”应为“playing”,“resons”应为“reasons”,“runing”应为“running”等。
2. 句子结构单调,缺乏复杂句型。
3. 逻辑连接不够流畅,如“as for me, I like sport is playing football”。
4. 段落间的过渡不够自然。