My Hobby

     It is well known that hobby is very important in our lives . As a matter of fact , hobby is good for us in many ways.For example,some people like singing , some people like danceing . As for me , my favorite is playing basketball.Here are the reasons.
     First of all , playing basketball can make me happy and help me make friends . In addition , it can help me realize my self-worth and teach me some new things . Last but not least , I hope I can  become the best basketball player , and I also hope I have a strong body .
     As a result , as far as I am concerned , I prefer playing basketball . palying basketball is very important , hopeful and absolutely necessary .

This composition on "My Hobby" will be assessed based on content, structure, and language use. Here's a breakdown of your essay:

1) **Content and Structure:**
   - The essay has a clear main idea and introduces the topic properly.
   - It provides reasons for why basketball is the author's favorite hobby and discusses its benefits.
   - There is a logical flow from introduction to conclusion, where the author reaffirms their preference for basketball.

2) **Language Use:**
   - Most of the language used is simple and clear; grammar structures generally meet the task's requirements.
   - There are few spelling mistakes such as "danceing" instead of "dancing," and "palying" instead of "playing."
   - Some expressions could be more sophisticated or varied to enhance the writing.

**Score:**
Based on the criteria provided, this composition fits in the Third or possibly second band. The content is mostly covered, and while the language is fairly simple, there aren't too many errors that drastically impact comprehension. However, the presence of spelling errors and some repetitive sentence structures would likely place it in the Third Band (13-18). With improvements, it could easily reach the Second Band.

**Suggestions for Improvement:**
1. **Spelling and Grammar:** Check for spelling errors ("danceing", "palying") and correct them.
2. **Variety in Sentences:** Use a variety of sentence structures and vocabulary to make the essay more engaging.
3. **Detail and Explanation:** Expand on each point with more detail or examples to better support your reasons.
4. **Concluding Sentence:** The final sentence can be revised for clarity and impact. For example, "In conclusion, playing basketball is not just a hobby, but an essential part of my life because it brings happiness, friendships, and personal growth."

With these adjustments, your essay will be stronger and clearer.