Online Shopping

Online shopping is become more and more very popular in our daily life.Nowadays many people choose online shopping improve themselves life style.You can learn something on the internet as well as on the newspaper,etc.
    I am interested in online shopping and I really enjoy it.Because of it brings us much happiness.For example,it not only helps us improve our life quality,but also it brings us much convenice.what's more,it brings us very meaningful life.In addition,we can buy different kind of things in online,and it can let our choose ourselves like things,so I find it is very much.
    So campared to others,I perfer it.

### 评分：

根据评分标准，这篇作文属于 **第四档**：7-12 分。

#### 完成了一部分试题规定的任务：

1. **遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点**。
2. **语法结构和词汇单调**。
3. **语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解**。

具体打分建议：10 分。

### 不足之处和改进建议：

#### 1. 内容要点：
   - 作文没有清楚表达正反两方面的观点，仅仅提到自己喜欢网购，但没有理由支撑其优点和缺点。
   - 应该更详细地讨论在线购物的优点和可能存在的缺点。

#### 2. 语法与词汇：
   - “Online shopping is become more and more very popular...” 应改为 “Online shopping has become increasingly popular...”
   - “improve themselves life style” 应改为 “to improve their lifestyle.”
   - “On the internet as well as on the newspaper” 应改为 “on the internet and in newspapers.”
   - “Because of it brings us much happiness” 应改为 “because it brings us a lot of happiness.”
   - “it not only helps us improve our life quality,but also it brings us much convenice” 应改为 “it not only helps us improve our quality of life, but also brings us a lot of convenience.”
   - “what's more,it brings us very meaningful life” 应改为 “What's more, it makes our life very meaningful.”
   - “buy different kind of things in online” 应改为 “buy different kinds of things online.”
   - “let our choose ourselves like things” 应改为 “allows us to choose things we like.”

#### 3. 拼写与标点：
   - “life style” 应为 “lifestyle”
   - “convenice” 应为 “convenience”
   - “campared” 应为 “compared”
   - “perfer” 应为 “prefer”

#### 修正后的版本：

1. Online Shopping
   
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3. Online shopping has become increasingly popular in our daily lives. Nowadays, many people choose online shopping to improve their lifestyle. You can learn about products on the internet and in newspapers, etc.
   
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5. I am interested in online shopping, and I really enjoy it because it brings us a lot of happiness. For example, it not only helps us improve our quality of life, but it also brings us a lot of convenience. What's more, it makes our life very meaningful. In addition, we can buy different kinds of things online, and it allows us to choose things we like, so I find it very enjoyable.
   
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7. Compared to other shopping methods, I prefer online shopping.

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