Exercise Every Day
Nowadays,more and more people talking about that do you have exercise every day.
somepeople hold that exercise every day bring healthy body to their .However,the other people don't like exercise every day.
As for me ,my family like exercise,such,playing ping-pong and running and playing basketball sports.By exercise,it is not only interesting to my family but also it is helps give my family a healthy bodies.poss sports,I find that after sports we have eating many foods and beneficial give me very good body.so I like exercise every day ,it is giving me many advergest.
Thank you for submitting your essay titled "Exercise Every Day". Here is an evaluation based on the provided scoring criteria:
### Content and Structure
You have attempted to address the importance of daily exercise. However, there are several areas where clarity and thoroughness can be improved. You have included some key points about family activities and benefits of exercise but need to elaborate more clearly and coherently.
### Language Use
- Vocabulary: Your vocabulary is basic and sometimes used incorrectly.
- Grammar and Syntax: There are several grammatical errors that make understanding difficult. Subject-verb agreement, punctuation, and sentence structure need significant improvement.
- Spelling and Punctuation: A number of basic spelling and punctuation errors are present which further impact the readability and overall coherence of your essay.
## Scoring Based on Criteria
### Content and Organization:
- **First Tier (25-30 points):** Not applicable as the content is not fully covered and lacks clear organization.
- **Second Tier (19-24 points):** Not applicable due to incomplete expression of key content points and multiple errors.
- **Third Tier (13-18 points):** This is more applicable. Key content points are touched upon but not well-developed. Basic organizational structure is present but weak.
- **Fourth Tier (7-12 points):** Given the various grammatical errors, limited vocabulary, and unclear expression of ideas, this is a suitable range.
- **Fifth Tier (1-6 points):** While significantly flawed, there is some attempt to address the topic, so this range would be too harsh.
Considering the overall impression and the specific flaws in grammar, vocabulary, and content clarity, I would place your essay in the fourth tier with a score of around 10 out of 30.
### Areas for Improvement:
1. **Grammar and Syntax:** Focus on correcting subject-verb agreement issues and sentence structures.
2. **Vocabulary:** Expand your range of vocabulary and practice using words in the correct context.
3. **Content Development:** Provide clearer, more detailed explanations of how exercise benefits you and your family.
4. **Punctuation and Spelling:** Pay closer attention to punctuation marks and spellings.
5. **Coherent Structure:** Ensure each paragraph clearly develops a single idea and flows logically from one to the next.
Please consider these suggestions for your next revision. Practice regularly, and don’t hesitate to seek feedback from teachers or peers. Keep up the effort!
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