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                                                                                                 Exercise Every Day



    Recently, more and more people are talking about exercise every day. From my perspective, it is totally undoubted that exercise  have many benefits . The benefit so are listed as below.

    The first point that I want to mention is that outdoor exercise can direct contact with nature and have a chance to communicate with more classmates.What is more, Exercise will keep you healthy, which is because it will stretch your body.
    From what I mention above,Though the many benefits of exercise, I still can't stick to it every day.So my a classmates and I made a decision,is to exercise every day.

Overall, your essay on "Exercise Every Day" has some good points but also some areas that need improvement.

1. Grammar and sentence structure:
- "exercise have many benefits" should be "exercise has many benefits" because exercise is a singular noun.
- "The benefit so are listed as below." should be "The benefits are listed below."
- "can direct contact with nature" should be "can have direct contact with nature."
- "and have a chance to communicate with more classmates" could be improved to "and have the opportunity to communicate with more classmates."
- "Exercise will keep you healthy, which is because it will stretch your body." This sentence is unclear and needs to be revised for clarity.

2. Content:
- Your points about outdoor exercise and its benefits are good, but they could be expanded upon with more detail and examples.
- The essay could benefit from discussing different types of exercise and their specific benefits.
- You may want to address potential obstacles to exercising every day and provide strategies for overcoming them.

3. Organization:
- The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Consider adding these sections to provide a better structure.
- Each point should be developed into separate paragraphs for better organization and readability.

In conclusion, your essay shows potential, but it needs some revision for grammar, content, and organization. Keep practicing and pay attention to these areas to improve your writing skills.