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My Favorite Job

   It is well know that working is very important in our lives. As a matter of face,nearly we can not live without work. As for me,my faverite job is being a teacher.Here are the reasons.
   First of all,being a teacher makes me get to know the world and help me with my studies. In addition,being a teacher is very meaningful,it helps me realize my self-worth.Last but not least,if I work as a teacher,I can spend more time with my family and friend.
  As a result,as far as I am concerned, my favorite job is being a teacher.



请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
语言运用较为准确、恰当

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
语法结构和词汇单调。
语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

明显遗漏内容要点
语法结构和词汇极单调
语言错误很多，严重影响理解

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

评分：第三档  13-18分

批改：

My Favorite Job

It is well known that working is very important in our lives. As a matter of fact, we can hardly live without work. As for me, my favorite job is being a teacher. Here are the reasons.

First of all, being a teacher allows me to get to know the world and helps me with my studies. In addition, being a teacher is very meaningful; it helps me realize my self-worth. Last but not least, if I work as a teacher, I can spend more time with my family and friends.

As a result, as far as I am concerned, my favorite job is being a teacher.

批改说明：

该作文的内容基本满足了题目要求，有明确的主题和论据。但在语言运用方面存在一些问题：

1. 第一段开头部分，“It is well know that”应为“It is well known that”。

2. 第一段中的“As a matter of face”应为“As a matter of fact”。

3. 第二段开头，“First of all, being a teacher makes me get to know the world and help me with my studies”可以更具体地说明如何通过教师工作认识世界和提高学习能力。

4. 第三段开头，“Last but not least”后面的逗号应为冒号。

5. 最后一段结尾处，“my family and friend”应为“my family and friends”。

总体上，该作文的语言表达较为简单，虽然有一些语法错误和表达不准确的地方，但整体上能够清楚地表达出作者对教师工作的喜爱，并列举了几个理由支持自己的观点。因此，根据评分标准，该作文可以被评为第三档，得分在13-18分之间。