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Dear Tom,
How is everything going?
This is Li Ke  from China. I am writing this email to share a thing about I had found a job of teacher with you. Here are the reasons as blew.

Fist and foremost, It is obvious that I fancy being a teacher most. Because teacher can give students a better future,  teacher can pass the knowledge down students, so that students can give a better job in the future. What is more, it is a job that can give your confidence, which is because most people respect teacher and students admire their teacher. Last but not least, teacher has many kinds of holiday,so that can make you with family and friends enjoy this holiday.

In a word, I like being a teacher very much.

I hope you and your family good health and happiness. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Best wishes
Li Ke

Dear Li Ke,

Thank you for sharing with me your passion for teaching. However, I noticed a few errors in your email that I would like to point out for you to improve.

Firstly, it should be "blow" instead of "blew". Secondly, you used "fancy" instead of "prefer". The word "fancy" is more informal and not appropriate in a professional setting. Thirdly, the sentence "Because teacher can give students a better future" should be "Because teachers can help students have a better future". Fourthly, "give your confidence" should be "give you confidence". Lastly, the sentence "teacher has many kinds of holiday" should be "teachers have many holidays".

Here is an improved version of your email:

Dear Tom,

I hope this email finds you well. My name is Li Ke from China and I have some exciting news to share with you. After much consideration, I have decided that my preferred career path is that of a teacher. Teaching allows me to pass on knowledge to students, helping them secure a better future. It is a profession that also instills confidence as it is respected by society and admired by students. Moreover, teachers are fortunate enough to enjoy several holidays which allow for quality time with family and friends.

Thank you for taking the time to read this email. I hope you and your family are in good health and happiness. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Best wishes,
Li Ke

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