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sophia168118 发表于 2024-10-17 21:24 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
I like playing sports.

I really like playing sports, especially swimming, whether it is summer or winter. There are several reason why I am so passionate about sports.

Firstly, playing sports has a comforting effect on me. Whenever I`m feeling down, it provides relief and hepls me feel better. Sports can also rduce stress, make depression more bearable, and help me relax.

Secondly, playing sports can help me maintain good health. It is one of the most active and effective ways to enhancephysical well-being.Furthermore, participating in sports activities makes it easier for me to ake friends who share the some interests. It`s always enhoyable to connect with others through the joy of sports.

In conclusion, I love playing sports because it brings numerous benefits to my life.
王艳 发表于 2024-10-17 21:25 | 显示全部楼层
Thank you for sharing your essay. Overall, the essay is well-structured and expresses your enthusiasm for playing sports. Based on your content and language use, I will provide a score and some suggestions for improvement.

Score: 22/30 (Second档)

Strengths:
1. The essay clearly expresses your passion for sports and provides reasons to support your viewpoint.
2. The structure is logical with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Areas for Improvement:
1. **Content Expansion**: While the essay covers the main reasons why you enjoy sports, adding a personal anecdote or specific example could make it more engaging.
   
2. **Grammar and Spelling**: There are a few minor errors that should be corrected:
   - "reason" should be "reasons" in the sentence "There are several reason."
   - "hepls" should be corrected to "helps."
   - "rduce" should be corrected to "reduce."
   - "enhancephysical" should be split into two words "enhance physical."
   - "ake friends" should be "make friends."
   - "some" should be "same."
   - "enhoyable" should be "enjoyable."

3. **Word Choice and Variety**: Varying sentence structure and word choice can enhance fluency. For example:
   - Instead of "playing sports has a comforting effect on me," you could say, "Engaging in sports activities soothes my mind."
   
4. **Connection of Ideas**: The transition between ideas could be smoother. Consider using transitional phrases to connect your thoughts more coherently.

Revised Introduction:
"I hold a deep fondness for playing sports, with swimming being a particular favorite regardless of the season. Numerous reasons fuel my enthusiasm for sports, and they extend beyond mere enjoyment."

By incorporating these suggestions, your essay can become more polished and cohesive. Keep up the good work!
sophia168118楼主 发表于 2024-10-17 21:25 | 显示全部楼层
中文翻译你的回复
王艳 发表于 2024-10-17 21:26 | 显示全部楼层


感谢你分享你的作文。总体来说,文章结构良好,并且表达了你对运动的热情。根据你的内容和语言使用情况,我将提供一个评分以及一些改进建议。

评分:22/30(第二档)

优点:
1. 文章清晰地表达了你对运动的热爱,并提供了支持观点的理由。
2. 结构合理,有引言、正文段落和结论。

改进建议:
1. **内容扩展**:虽然文章涵盖了你喜欢运动的主要原因,但增加一个个人轶事或具体例子可能让文章更吸引人。

2. **语法和拼写**:有几个小错误需要修正:
   - "reason" 应为 "reasons" 在 "There are several reason."
   - "hepls" 应改为 "helps."
   - "rduce" 应改为 "reduce."
   - "enhancephysical" 应分为两个词 "enhance physical."
   - "ake friends" 应为 "make friends."
   - "some" 应为 "same."
   - "enhoyable" 应为 "enjoyable."

3. **用词和多样性**:变化句子结构和用词可以提高流畅性。例如:
   - 可以将 "playing sports has a comforting effect on me," 改为 "Engaging in sports activities soothes my mind."

4. **思路衔接**:各个观点之间的过渡可以更顺滑。考虑使用过渡短语让你的思路更连贯。

修改后的引言:
"我非常热爱运动,无论季节如何,游泳尤其是我的最爱。支撑我对运动热情的理由不仅仅局限于享受乐趣。"

通过采用这些建议,你的文章可以更加精炼和连贯。继续加油!
sophia168118楼主 发表于 2024-10-17 21:26 | 显示全部楼层
翻译句子:我非常热爱运动,无论季节如何,游泳尤其是我的最爱。支撑我对运动热情的理由不仅仅局限于享受乐趣
王艳 发表于 2024-10-17 21:27 | 显示全部楼层
sophia168118 发表于 2024-10-17 21:26
翻译句子:我非常热爱运动,无论季节如何,游泳尤其是 ...


I hold a deep fondness for sports, with swimming being my favorite regardless of the season. The reasons behind my enthusiasm for sports extend beyond mere enjoyment.
sophia168118楼主 发表于 2024-10-17 22:00 | 显示全部楼层
playing sports has a comforting effect on me.
该句是否有语法错误。单复数是否运用准确
王艳 发表于 2024-10-17 22:00 | 显示全部楼层
sophia168118 发表于 2024-10-17 22:00
playing sports has a comforting effect on me.
该 ...


The sentence "playing sports has a comforting effect on me" is grammatically correct, and the use of singular and plural forms is accurate. Here's the breakdown:

1. **Subject**: "laying sports" is the gerund phrase serving as the subject of the sentence. In English, gerunds (verbs ending in -ing that function as nouns) are considered singular when they act as the subject of the sentence.
   
2. **Verb**: "has" is the correct singular form of the verb "have" to agree with the singular subject "playing sports."

3. **Object**: "a comforting effect" appropriately uses the singular form, indicating one comforting effect.

Therefore, there are no grammatical errors in this sentence, and the singular-plural usage is correct.
sophia168118楼主 发表于 2024-10-17 22:00 | 显示全部楼层
中文翻译你回复的内容
王艳 发表于 2024-10-17 22:00 | 显示全部楼层
sophia168118 发表于 2024-10-17 22:00
中文翻译你回复的内容


这句话“playing sports has a comforting effect on me”在语法上是正确的,单复数的使用也准确。以下是具体分析:

1. **主语**:“Playing sports” 是动名词短语,作为句子的主语。在英语中,当动名词(以 -ing 结尾的动词形式,充当名词功能)作为句子的主语时,被视为单数。
   
2. **动词**:“has” 是动词 “have” 的正确单数形式,与单数主语 “playing sports” 一致。

3. **宾语**:“a comforting effect” 正确地使用了单数形式,表示一个安慰效果。

因此,这个句子没有语法错误,单复数的使用也是正确的。
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