Save our earth

       It is well known that save our earth is very important in our lives.As a matter of fact,it is good for us in many ways.For example,it can make us have a comfortable and clean environment.So in order to protect our the environment,here are the reasons we should do things.
      Protect the environment is very meaningful.First of all,we should plant more trees and avoid waste water resource.In addition,the government should make some laws to protect environment.Last but not least,the government should encourage people to save other things.
      As a result,as far as I am concerned.Prevent environment is very important,helpful and absolutely necessary.

**评分**

根据评分标准，我将这篇作文评为第三档13-18分。

**内容要点**

- 作文涉及到了保护地球的重要性以及保护环境的措施，这是作文的主要内容要点。
- 然而，作文缺乏具体的措施细节，可增加更多实际的例子或建议以增强说服力。

**篇章结构**

- 文章总体结构清晰，有引言、正文和结尾。
- 但段落之间的逻辑连接稍显不足，例如第二段和第三段之间的过渡不够流畅。

**语言运用**

- 语法和词汇基本满足最低要求，但存在一些语言错误，如“protect our the environment”和“Prevent environment”等，需要进行纠正。
- 语言表达相对简单，可以通过使用更丰富的词汇和多样化的句型来提高语言表现力。

**批改建议**

1. **增加细节**：可以加入更多具体措施或例子，例如个人能够采取的行动或成功的环保案例。
   
2. **修正语法错误**：修正如以下错误：
   - “protect our the environment”应为“protect our environment”。
   - “Prevent environment”该表述不准确，应改为“Protecting the environment”。

3. **丰富词汇和句型**：使用更复杂的句子结构和丰富的词汇，提高语言层次。例如，可以将“the government should encourage people to save other things”扩展为“the government should promote sustainable practices among citizens by encouraging recycling and reducing waste”.

4. **改善过渡**：增强段落间的逻辑连接，例如在第三段前加入“Given the aforementioned reasons,”等过渡词组以增强连贯性。