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黄金城SA 发表于 2024-9-24 09:20 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
     With the development of the internet,it is well known that books are very important in our lives.As a matter of fact,books are good for us in many ways.Some people like e-books,some people like paper books.As for me,I prefer e-books.Here are the reasons.
     First of all,e-books can save money for us,because paper-books are very expensive.In addition,e-books are very convenient to carry with,it not only brings us a lot of useful things,but also can make us to know the world.Last but not least,e-books are good for the environment.Peolple should choose e-books to reduce resource waste and environment pollution.
     As a result, as far as I am concerned,I prefer e-books.
陶果果 发表于 2024-9-24 09:20 | 显示全部楼层
这篇文章主题明确,围绕电子书和纸质书的优势展开论述。根据评分标准进行打分并给出建议:

### 评分:
#### 内容要点:16/18
- 提到了关键内容要点,如电子书节省金钱、便于携带以及环保等,但缺乏一定的深度分析和列举具体例子。

#### 篇章结构:4/6
- 文章结构较为清晰,有段落分隔和逻辑顺序,但有些部分可以更流畅和自然,例如开头和结尾过渡的优化。

#### 语言运用:3/6
- 大部分语法结构和词汇使用基本正确,但存在多处语言错误和表达不够准确的地方。

### 综合得分:23/30

### 批改建议:
1. **开头的改善**:第一句话稍显笼统,可以更加具体一点。例如:“In the digital age, the debate between e-books and paper books has become more prominent.”
2. **更详细的论据**:增加具体的例子或数据支持你的观点,使文章更具说服力。例如,你可以提到具体的电子书应用程序或对比一下电子书和纸质书的价格差异。
3. **语言精确性**:
   - “it is well known that books are very important in our lives.” 可以改为 “Books have always been an essential part of our lives.”
   - “e-books can save money for us” 可以简化为 “e-books can save us money.”
   - “can make us to know the world” 中的“to”是多余的,应该去掉。
   - “Peolple” 是拼写错误,应改为 “People”。

4. **润色结尾**:结尾可以更有力地总结全文并呼应开头。例如:“To conclude, given their cost-effectiveness, convenience, and environmental benefits, I firmly believe that e-books are a better choice in today's world.”

5. **改善连贯性**:在每个段落之间增加过渡句,使文章更连贯。例如,“Furthermore, e-books are not only budget-friendly but also environmentally responsible.”

通过以上修改,可以进一步提升文章质量,使其更加符合最高档次的评分标准。
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