My Favorite Job

      With the development of the social,it is well know that working is very important in our lives.As a matter of fact,we need a good job for life.As for me,my favorite is being a teacher.Here are the reasons
     First of all,being a teacher gets me to know the world,and can make me learn very meaningful things.In addition,as a teacher is very meaningful,for it not only helps me realize self-worth,but also brings us much happiness.Last but not least,I hope I can be a teacher,if I work is being a teacher,I can spend much time with my family and friends.
     As a result,as for as I connected,my favorite job is being a teacher.

### 评分和点评

这篇作文基本上完成了试题规定的任务，但在词汇和语法上存在一些问题，这些问题有时影响到理解。按照评分标准，大致可以归入第三档（13-18分）。

#### 内容要点：
1. 表达清楚
2. 提供了几个成为教师的原因
3. 提到个人愿望和工作对家庭与朋友的影响

#### 优点：
1. 作文整体结构清晰，有一个明确的开头和结尾。
2. 理由较为明确且具体。

#### 不足：
1. 文章中有多处语法错误和拼写错误，例如 "it is well know" 应该是 "it is well known"，"as for as I connected" 应该改为 "as far as I am concerned"。
2. 句子结构有些单调，缺乏多样性。
3. 某些表达比较生硬，比如“if I work is being a teacher” 可以改为 “if my job is being a teacher”。

#### 批改建议：
1. **语法准确性**：特别注意时态和短语搭配的正确使用。例如 "With the development of the social" 应该改为 "With the development of society"。
2. **词汇选择**：增加词汇的多样性，使用更丰富的词汇来表达思想。
3. **句子结构**：尝试使用不同的句子结构，使文章更加生动和流畅。
4. **细节补充**：可以添加更多具体例子或细节说明，比如具体描述一下教师在帮助学生过程中带给你的快乐和满足感。
5. **标点符号和拼写**：仔细检查标点符号和拼写错误，确保通顺和准确。

### 修正后的版本：

1. My Favorite Job
   
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3. With the development of society, it is well known that working is very important in our lives. As a matter of fact, we need a good job for life. As for me, my favorite job is being a teacher. Here are the reasons:
   
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5. First of all, being a teacher allows me to explore the world and learn meaningful things. In addition, teaching is very significant because it not only helps me realize my self-worth but also brings much happiness. Last but not least, if my job is being a teacher, I can spend more time with my family and friends.
   
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7. As a result, as far as I am concerned, my favorite job is being a teacher.

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根据这些标准和建议，这篇作文应得14-16分，属于第三档。