### 评分
根据评分标准，该篇作文总体上完成了试题规定的任务，但存在一些问题，使得理解有一定困难。通过分析，其评分可以划分在第 **三档 (13-18 分)** 范围内。现从以下几个方面进行具体说明：
### 内容要点
作文基本提及了关键内容要点，如春天来临的快乐、参与的体育活动以及喜欢篮球的原因。然而，表达不够清晰，有些内容略显重复。
### 语法结构和词汇
作文使用了一些基本的语法结构和词汇，但存在明显的语法错误和拼写错误。例如：
- "Spring is coming" 中没有必要每个单词首字母大写。
- "expressstion" 应为 "expression"。
- "cooly" 应为“cool”。
- 多处地方缺少冠词 "the" 和介词 "in" 的正确运用 ("on the Spring day" 应该是 "in the spring").
### 语言错误
存在较多语法错误，影响理解。例如：
- "Because,the tree become green ,the children play many sports on the Spring day." 缺少连接词导致句子不连贯。
- “I favorite play basketball”应改为“I prefer playing basketball”。
### 建议与批改
- Spring is coming. Nowadays, more and more people talk about that spring is coming. When spring comes, many people express their happiness because the trees become green, and children play many sports in the spring.
- So, when spring comes, some people play ping-pong, football, and basketball. But I prefer to play basketball over other sports. The reasons are as follows:
- Firstly, when spring is coming, the weather is cool and windy. Playing basketball does not feel hot to me. I often play basketball with my father and good friends. My father tells me that sports bring health to everyone. Next, basketball is what my father taught me in his free time. Finally, I think that playing sports in the spring not only allows you to see a lot of greenery, which helps your eyes stay bright, but also brings good health to your family through sports.
### 具体修改建议
1. **格式和标点**：
- 修正标题大小写："Spring is Coming"
- 修改标点符号使用问题，如避免句子中不必要的逗号。
2. **语法和词汇**：
- 确保动词形式一致，“My father tells me”中的“tells”应该保持现在时态。
- 使用正确的形容词和副词：“cool and windy”而非“cooly and windy”，并避免重复使用短语如“when spring comes”。
3. **结构与连贯**：
- 做到段落连贯，从开篇到结论自然过渡。利用连接词如“Firstly”, “Next”, “Finally”使文章结构更明确。
通过以上修改，文章不仅能更好地传达作者的观点和情感，还能提升整体的语言运用水平，希望这对你的写作有所帮助。 |
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