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黄金城SA 发表于 2024-9-11 18:07 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
Self-study is very popular way to learn something.Nowadays many people choose this way to improve themseves,you can learn something on the Internet as well as on the book,etc.
     I am interested in self-study and I really enjoy it.But there is some difficulties in self-study.For example,we cannot understand many difficult thing only by ourselves.In addition,when we learn some new knowledge and words,We find it very diffculty,but self-study is very meaningful for us.further more,it not only helps us improve our learn ability,bu also it brings us a very important learn way.
    So,I prefer self-study.

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王艳 发表于 2024-9-11 18:07 | 显示全部楼层
### 评分与评语

#### 总体评价
这篇作文基本完成了试题规定的任务,提及了重要的内容要点,但存在一些语言错误和表达不清楚的地方。文章结构较为松散,语法和词汇使用有待提高。

#### 得分:16分

### 详细评分标准

- **第一档 (25-30分):** 不符合,未能圆满完成任务。
- **第二档 (19-24分):** 不符合,语言错误较多,影响理解。
- **第三档 (13-18分):** 基本符合,提及了关键内容要点,但存在不少语言错误。
- **第四档 (7-12分):** 不符合,文章整体尚可,但部分内容不清晰。
- **第五档 (1-6分):** 不符合,虽有些错误,但不至于严重影响理解。

### 不足之处与建议

1. **拼写和标点符号:**
   - "themseves" 应为 "themselves"。
   - "diffculty" 应为 "difficulty"。
   - "bu" 应为 "but"。
   - "further more" 应为 "furthermore"(合成一个词)。
   - 注意句子结尾的标点符号缺失,如第一段的最后一句。

2. **语法和词汇:**
   - **语法错误**:
     - "there is some difficulties" 应为 "there are some difficulties"。
     - "many difficult thing" 应为 "many difficult things"。
     - "when we learn some new knowledge and words, We find it very diffculty" 句子应重新组织,如 "when we learn new knowledge and words, we find it very difficult."
   - **词汇使用**:
     - "the book" 改为 "books" 更为恰当。
     - "improve our learn ability" 应为 "improve our learning ability"。

3. **表达和结构:**
   - 第一段和第二段之间缺乏自然过渡,可以加以改进。
   - 增加具体例子会使文章更加生动和具有说服力,如介绍一次成功的自学经历。

4. **书写格式:**
   - 文章需要更好地分段,每个段落表达一个明确的观点或主题。

### 改进后的示例

  1. Self-study English
  2. Self-study is a very popular way to learn something. Nowadays many people choose this method to improve themselves; you can learn on the Internet as well as through books, etc.

  3. I am interested in self-study and I really enjoy it. However, there are some difficulties in self-study. For example, we cannot understand many difficult things by ourselves. In addition, when we learn new knowledge and words, we find it very difficult. But self-study is very meaningful for us. Furthermore, it not only helps us improve our learning ability, but also brings us a very important learning method.

  4. In conclusion, I prefer self-study.
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