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Dear John

How are you,I heard to you want learn Chinese speak.SO I very agree and hold you to lesson chinese.

In that,you want to lesson that I write this E-mail give you some advices:Firstly,China curtuly is very good and Chinese is that we are mother speack,SO,You learn word is very important,it not only let you understand word but also let you speack chinese well.Next,you must leasson each word concern main,because,some one word main different main.so you need consident it word main.Eventually,I can teach you many chinese word that help you learn chinese on soon.

Best Wishes

Li Ke

请检查文章内容及给出评分。

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
• 语言运用较为准确、恰当
  

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
• 语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解
  

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

• 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
• 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
• 存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解
  

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

• 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇单调。
• 语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解
  

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

• 明显遗漏内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇极单调
• 语言错误很多，严重影响理解
  

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

这篇作文的总评分在4-6分之间，属于第五档的评分标准。以下是具体分析：

### 内容要点
- **缺少关键内容：** 尽管作者试图传达学习中文的重要性，并且表达了愿意帮助对方学习，但内容混乱，不完整。
- **不清晰：** 很多句子不完整或毫无逻辑，难以理解。

### 篇章结构
- **段落划分：** 文章没有明确的段落划分，影响了阅读体验。
- **连贯性：** 句子之间缺乏连贯性和逻辑性。

### 语言运用
- **语法错误：** 存在大量语法错误，例如时态错误、主谓不一致等。
- **拼写错误：** “curtuly” (应为"culture")， "speack" (应为"speak")等拼写错误频繁出现。
- **词汇单调：** 词汇选择和搭配非常基础，并且重复使用。

### 具体问题和修改建议
1. **拼写和标点：**
   - “Dear JohnHow are you,” 应改为 “Dear John, How are you?”
   
2. **语法和句子结构：**
   - “heard to you want learn Chinese speak.” 应改为 "I heard you want to learn how to speak Chinese."
   - “SO I very agree and hold you to lesson chinese.” 应改为 "So, I strongly agree and would like to help you with your Chinese lessons."
   
3. **词汇选择和表达：**
   - “China curtuly is very good” 应改为 "Chinese culture is very rich and interesting."
   - “you must leasson each word concern main” 改为 “you must pay attention to the meaning of each word”

4. **段落和结构：**
   - 将整篇文章分为清晰的段落，每个段落分别讨论一个主题，例如开头问候，主题发展，结尾总结。

综合这些问题和改进建议，可以修正如下：

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**Revised Email:**

Dear John,

How are you? I heard you want to learn how to speak Chinese. I strongly agree with your decision and would like to help you with your Chinese lessons.

Firstly, Chinese culture is very rich and interesting. Learning Chinese will not only help you understand our culture better but also improve your communication skills.

Secondly, it's important to learn each word carefully because some words have multiple meanings. Paying attention to the context is crucial for understanding the correct meaning of a word.

Finally, I can teach you many Chinese words that will help you learn Chinese quickly.

Best Wishes,
Li Ke

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这封修订过的信更加清晰、连贯，并且更符合英语言表达习惯。如果原文能够进行上述改进，评分可以大幅提高到第三或第四档次。