Spring Is Coming

Spring Is Coming
Have are four seasons in the China.but more and more people are likes spring.
When spring is coming,people are very happy,this reasons are follows:
Firstly,when spring is coming,the weather is rain and sunlight,people will some sports in the spring day.
their playing bing-pong,basketball and football sports.However,some people likes playing basketball than others sports.
Next,as for me,I like basketball too,when I go to home,I often playing basketball with my friend in the park.
it not only help us helthey bodies but also bring happiness to with my friend.so spring is coming let go to sports.

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
• 语言运用较为准确、恰当
  

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
• 语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解
  

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

• 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
• 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
• 存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解
  

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

• 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇单调。
• 语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解
  

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

• 明显遗漏内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇极单调
• 语言错误很多，严重影响理解
  

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

### Score: 7-12 (Fourth Tier)

### Rationale:
The essay attempts to complete the task by discussing the coming of spring and people's associated activities. However, it falls short in several key areas:

1. **Content and Clarity:** Some content points are mentioned, but they are not clearly or effectively expressed. The essay mentions general preferences for spring and some activities people engage in, but it lacks coherence and detail.
2. **Grammar and Vocabulary:** The text contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrases that impede understanding. These include issues with subject-verb agreement, verb tense, sentence structure, and article usage.
3. **Language Accuracy:** The inaccuracies in language usage significantly affect comprehension in some parts of the essay.
4. **Coherence and Structure:** The essay lacks a clear and logical structure. Ideas are presented randomly without clear transitions or organization.

### Recommendations for Improvement:
1. **Grammar and Sentence Structure:**
    - Avoid basic grammatical mistakes such as "there are four seasons" instead of "have are four seasons."
    - Ensure subject-verb agreement (e.g., "people like" instead of "people are likes").
    - Use appropriate verb tenses consistently.

    Example of correction:
    - "There are four seasons in China, but more and more people like spring."
   
2. **Clarity and Coherence:**
   - Organize the essay into clear paragraphs with distinct ideas.
   - Use transition words to connect sentences and paragraphs logically.

    Example of correction:
    - "When spring comes, people are very happy for several reasons. Firstly, the weather is a mix of rain and sunshine, which is perfect for outdoor sports."

3. **Details and Specificity:**
    - Provide more specific details to support statements. Describe the activities and why people enjoy them.

    Example of correction:
    - "eople often play sports like ping-pong, basketball, and football. Many prefer basketball over other sports. Personally, I also enjoy playing basketball. When I go home, I often play with my friends in the park."

4. **Vocabulary:**
    - Use a wider range of vocabulary and avoid repetition.

    Final corrected paragraph (example):
    - "Spring is a beloved season in China. When spring arrives, people feel joyful for various reasons. The combination of rain and sunshine makes it an ideal time for outdoor activities. Many people engage in sports such as ping-pong, basketball, and football. Among these, basketball is particularly popular. Personally, I share this preference. When I return home, I frequently play basketball with my friends in the park. This not only keeps us healthy but also brings us happiness. Therefore, with the arrival of spring, let's all enjoy outdoor sports and cherish the season."

By addressing these areas, the essay can better meet the requirements of the prompt and improve its overall coherence, clarity, and accuracy.