An Unforgettable Holiday

作文内容：An Unforgettable Holiday

There are many holiday in china. Such as the Spring Festival , the Qingming Festival , the  Mid -Autumn Festival and National Day. Each festival have it's own uniqueness. However I prefer the Spring Festival rather than the other. It is the most interesting festival in china.

When I was little. I did not know how to celebrate the spring Festival· My Mum made new colthes and a lots af decilision foods for us. After I grow up, I do the same thing for my boy as well· lt's not only interestng ,but also good for our family·It help us to be get closer wih our family .

That is my unforgetable holiday·

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
• 语言运用较为准确、恰当
  

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
• 语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解
  

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

• 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
• 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
• 存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解
  

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

• 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇单调。
• 语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解
  

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

• 明显遗漏内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇极单调
• 语言错误很多，严重影响理解
  

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

评分如下：

第三档 13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务，但存在一些语言错误，影响理解。

具体分析如下：
1. 内容要点：文章提到了中国的几个节日，但只强调了春节的重要性。未提及其他节日的独特之处，也未展开对春节的描述。
2. 篇章结构：文章缺乏清晰的结构，没有明确的开头、发展和结尾。内容之间缺乏过渡，逻辑关系不够紧密。
3. 语言运用：文章存在较多的语言错误，例如：“new colthes”应为"new clothes"；“a lots af decilision foods”应为"a lot of delicious foods"；“be get closer wih our family”应为"get closer with our family"等。另外，句子结构有些简单，表达不够丰富多样。

总体来说，文章虽然涉及了春节的主题，但内容表述较为简单，语言表达存在较多错误，缺乏深入的描述和展开。建议在未来的写作中更加注意内容的丰富性和准确性，同时提高语言运用的准确性和多样性。

有范文吗

minling 发表于 2024-04-11 11:01
有范文吗

当然，以下是一个关于春节的范文：

An Unforgettable Spring Festival

In China, there are many traditional holidays such as the Qingming Festival, the Mid-Autumn Festival, and National Day. However, my favorite holiday is the Spring Festival. It is the most important and festive time of the year for me.

When I was a child, I used to be mesmerized by the red lanterns hanging outside our house and the sound of firecrackers filling the air. My family would gather together to make dumplings, prepare special dishes, and clean the house to welcome the new year. It was a time of joy, reunion, and celebration.

As I grew older, I realized that the Spring Festival is not just about the festivities, but also about cherishing family bonds and traditions. It is a time to reflect on the past year and look forward to the future with hope and optimism. I now understand the significance of paying respects to my ancestors, visiting relatives, and exchanging blessings for a prosperous year ahead.

The memories of the Spring Festival remain etched in my heart forever. It is a time when I feel closest to my family and my cultural roots. The warmth of our traditions, the laughter shared with loved ones, and the spirit of unity that surrounds us during this time make it truly unforgettable.

In conclusion, the Spring Festival holds a special place in my heart. It is a time of tradition, togetherness, and new beginnings. No matter where life takes me, the memories of the Spring Festival will always bring me back to the core of who I am and where I come from.

这个范文着重表达了春节对作者的重要性，并展示了春节带来的喜悦、团聚和传统的意义。希望能对你有所启发。