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夏天 发表于 2024-4-4 15:20 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
Nowadays,more and more people tale about Dream Trip,that dream trip is popular and trendy in my lives.so my dream trip is beijing.
The main reasons are listed as follows:
In the first place,i from hebei,i  want to beijing very much,because,beijing is beautiful city.
In the second place,beijing has changcheng the wall、zijingong and the many place.
last but not the least,beijing people is very very good,their teaches you sports help your health.
as far as i am concerned,i like beijing people and beijing places,because beijing is beautiful city.
To sum up,my favorite trip is beijing ,welcome you to beijing.
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王艳 发表于 2024-4-4 15:20 | 显示全部楼层
以下是对您提供的文本进行的修改:

My Dream Trip Nowadays, more and more people talk about their dream trips, making it a popular and trendy topic in our lives. My dream trip destination is Beijing. The main reasons for choosing Beijing are as follows: Firstly, I am from Hebei and have always desired to visit Beijing because it is a beautiful city. Secondly, Beijing offers attractions such as the Great Wall, the Forbidden City, and many other historical sites. Last but not least, the people of Beijing are very friendly and helpful, promoting a healthy lifestyle through sports and activities. In my opinion, I am drawn to the people and places of Beijing because it is a beautiful city. In conclusion, my ideal trip is to Beijing. I welcome you to visit this amazing city.

经过修改后,语法和表达更加流畅,清晰地描述了您对北京作为梦想旅行目的地的喜爱和原因。根据修改后的文本,我会给予10分的评分。希望这次的修改对您有所帮助!
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