作文批改

作文内容：

Recently,more and more people are talking aboutsave our earth.From my perspective,it is totally undoubted that our duty toprotect the earth.The reasons why I believe so are listed as below.

The first point that I want to mention isthat we protect drinkingwater and stop polluting it, and that is Water is thesource of life. What is more, it’s easier for us to understand that to protectthe earth is to protect ourselves, which is because the earth is where we live.

Form what I mention above, we can easily cometo the conclusion that our duty to protect the earth. After all water is thesource of life and the earth is where we live.

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
• 语言运用较为准确、恰当
  

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
• 语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解
  

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

• 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
• 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
• 存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解
  

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

• 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇单调。
• 语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解
  

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

• 明显遗漏内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇极单调
• 语言错误很多，严重影响理解
  

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

作文批改如下：

Recently, more and more people are talking about saving our earth. From my perspective, it is undoubtable that it is our duty to protect the earth. The reasons why I believe so are listed below. The first point I want to mention is that we need to protect drinking water and stop polluting it, as water is the source of life. Furthermore, it is easy to understand that protecting the earth means protecting ourselves, as it is where we live. Based on what I mentioned above, we can easily conclude that it is our duty to protect the earth, considering that water is the source of life and the earth is our home.

评分原则：
根据作文内容的清晰度、观点是否完整以及语言运用的准确性进行评分。

1) 英语表达方面，需要注意以下问题：
- 第一段开头的 "totally undoubted" 应该改为 "undoubtedly", 属于词汇错误；
- 第二段的 "stop polluting it, and that is Water is the source of life" 应改为 "and that is because water is the source of life"，属于句子结构错误；
- 第三段的 "we can easily cometo" 应改为 "we can easily come to"，属于拼写错误；
- 第四段的 "Form what I mention above" 应改为 "From what I mention above"，属于拼写错误；
- 最后一段的 "considering that water is the source of life and the earth is our home" 表达不够流畅，可以改为 "Considering that water is the source of life and the earth is our home, it is evident that protecting the earth is our duty."

2) 结构方面：
- 每一段都有一个主要观点，但缺乏过渡句子来连接各个观点，需要加强段落间的连贯性。

基于以上问题，对该作文进行打分如下：

第一档：25-30分