作文批改及评分

Physical exercise
It is often said that‘life lies in movement’ ,physical exercise is a necessary part of people life,physical exercise is very beneficial to people's physical health.From my perspective,ti is totally undoubted that exercise is one of the keys to a healthy life,especially running.the reasons why i believe so are listed as below.

First of all,attending sports activities can help people build a strong body and keep energetic , physical exercise is an effective way to release pressure and keep a pleasant mood.Secondly,by attending physical activities that people can have chances to contract and communicate with others,which can help them improve their social skills. it is easier to make friends while take part in sport activities,because you have the same interest ,it is important for making friends.Besides many community provide a lot of sports facilities for people to do physical exercise,people can choose freely according to their interests and needs.as for me,i am keen on all kinds of ball games,especially football and basketball.from these games, i have gained great pleasure。 So from what i mention above ,we can easily come to the conclude that everyone should not hesitate to attend sports activities.
All in all ,happiness comes from sports，health comes from sports,I get a lot benefit from physical exercise .
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1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

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评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

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2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
语言运用较为准确、恰当

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解

作文批改及评分：

总评：本篇作文大致达到了一般水平，但还存在一些语法错误和表达不够准确的问题。文章结构较为简单，开头缺乏引入和背景介绍，段落之间缺乏逻辑连接。建议在写作中增加论证和举例的部分，使文章更具说服力。

得分：22分（第二档）

具体评分如下：

1. 内容要点不齐全，只涉及到了参加体育活动对身体健康和社交能力的好处，没有给出具体的例子或论证。-1分

2. 语法结构和词汇基本符合任务要求，但有些地方使用不恰当。例如：“it is totally undoubted that exercise is one of the keys to a healthy life”中应该使用“undoubtedly”而不是“totally undoubted”。另外，“build a strong body”更恰当的用法是“develop a strong body”。-1分

3. 具体论证和举例不够充分。只是简单提到了参加体育活动可以帮助释放压力和保持愉快的心情，以及可以帮助提高社交能力和交到朋友，但没有给出具体的例子或详细的论述。-1分

4. 语言运用存在一些错误。例如“contract and communicate”应该是“interact and communicate”。另外，“chances to contract and communicate with others”中的“contract”应该是“interact”。-1分

5. 开头和结尾的总结有点简单，缺乏新颖的表达。建议加入一些引人入胜的开头和总结部分，以提高整篇文章的吸引力和说服力。-1分

总体来说，这篇作文在内容组织和语言运用上还有较大的提升空间。建议在写作时注意语法和表达的准确性，同时增加具体的例子和论证，使文章更有说服力。此外，也需要注意段落之间的逻辑关系和过渡，使文章更连贯。