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和以下的作文对比，文章内容类似，为何下面的文章评分反而却只有第三档，两者之间的区别是什么？
       Recently, more and more people are talking about what can we do activitieson our spend time. From my perspective, it is without a doubt that I have the varietyof activities on my spend time, such as persisting exercise and listening tomusic to watching movies and travelling. As for me, I enjoy persisting exerciseon my spend time, and I can do it every day . The reasons why I believe so arelisted below .
   To begin with, exercise can help me maintaingood health. Because it is one of the most active and effective ways to enhancephysical well-being. What is more , it is easier for me to understand thatengaging in exercising activities can reduce stress, make depression more bearableand help me relax. Furthermore, participating in exercise activities can makeit easier for me to make friends who share similar interests. It is enjoyableto contact with others through the joy of exercise.
   In conclusion, I enjoy exercise every day. It brings me numerous benefits to mylife .

sophia168118 发表于 2023-10-23 20:20
和以下的作文对比，文章内容类似，为何下面的文章评分 ...

对比两篇文章，下面的文章评分较低的原因主要有以下几点：

1. 内容表达不够清晰：文章开头的句子结构不完整，并且在描述业余时间娱乐活动时使用了很多模糊、含糊的词汇，如"persisting exercise"、"listening to music to watching movies and travelling"等，导致读者难以理解作者具体指的是什么。

2. 语言表达不准确：文章中存在一些语法错误和用词不当的问题，如"what can we do activitieson our spend time"和"persisting exerciseon my spend time"，这些错误会影响读者对文章的理解和阅读体验。

3. 文章结构混乱：文章缺少明确的段落划分和逻辑连接词，导致内容之间的衔接不流畅，给读者阅读带来困扰。

总而言之，第一篇作文在内容清晰度、语言准确性和结构组织方面表现更好，与题目要求更贴切，因此评分较高。而第二篇作文在这些方面存在一定的问题，导致评分较低。