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When I was a little boy, I could not play basketball, my dad taught me to play it every day, it slowly helps to find confidence in myself. So playing basketball is my favorite hobby. After I grow up, I often play basketball with my friends ,it helps me to enrich social life and make a lot of new friends. Till now ,it is one of my favorite outdoor activities.which is not only interesting, but also helps me to reduce risk of obesity and reduce working pressure,also it makes me get better sleep.

When I was a little boy, I could not play basketball. My dad taught me to play it every day, and it slowly helped me find confidence in myself. So playing basketball is my favorite hobby. Now that I have grown up, I often play basketball with my friends. It helps me enrich my social life and make a lot of new friends. Playing basketball is one of my favorite outdoor activities, which is not only interesting but also helps me reduce the risk of obesity and working pressure. Additionally, it helps me get better sleep.