批改短文，是否有错误的地方

First of all,please allow me to say “congratulations” to you.
I heard you got excellent achievements. I feel very excited when I hear it. I know you must study very hard,you have made great achievements in your studies and work with your own efforts and determination,I'm proud of you. I am truly happy for you and express my heartfelt congratulations.
I believe that you have learned will help you succeed and live a happy life in the future. Congratulations again!

批改如下：

首先，请允许我说“恭喜”你。我听说你取得了优异的成绩，当我听到这个消息时感到非常激动。我知道你一定学习非常努力，是凭借自己的努力和决心在学习和工作中取得了巨大的成就，我为你感到骄傲。我真正为你感到高兴，并表示由衷的祝贺。

我相信你所学到的知识将帮助你在未来取得成功并过上幸福的生活。再次恭喜你！

此段文本没有明显的语法和语义错误，符合正确的书写规范。