spend pocket money wisely

It is well known that spending pocket money wisely is very significant in our lives. As a matter of fact, spending pocket money wisely is good for us in many ways. As a student, Our pocket money usually from our parents, Which buy foods, clothes and so on. In order to spend pocket money wisely, Here are the things we should do.
First of all,it is no doubt that We should find out want and need. We can make a list of our necessity. In addition, it's important that learning save money. We can save a lot of money to help others. Last but not least, We can't pay a sum of money for foods and other things.
As a result, as far as I am concerned, learning spend  pocket money wisely is very important, helpful and absolutely necessary.

**评分：15分（第三档）**

**优点：**
1. 文章讨论了花销零用钱的重要性，提到了几个关键点。
2. 想要传达节省和合理消费的重要性。

**不足：**
1. 内容重复，如第一段和结尾都提到“spending pocket money wisely is important”。
2. 语法错误频繁，如“Which buy foods, clothes and so on”句子结构不正确。
3. 词汇和表达方式比较单调，没有使用丰富的词汇和语句结构。
4. 段落结构不够清晰，需要更有逻辑地组织内容。

**建议：**
1. 避免重复表达，尝试从不同角度讨论主题。
2. 改正语法错误，例如“our pocket money usually comes from our parents,”。
3. 增加具体例子来支持观点，比如具体该如何储蓄或规划零用钱。
4. 加强段落之间的衔接，使文章更加连贯。
5. 使用多样化的词汇和句式，提高语言的丰富性。