作文批改：Exercise Every Day

Exercise Every Day

Exercising is vital in our lives.As a matter of fact doing exercise is good for us in many ways. Some people like running, some people like cycling. As for me, my favorite sports is swimming, whether it is summer or winter. Here are several reasons why I am so passionate about swimming.
First of all,  swimming has a comforting effect on me. Whenever I`m fell down, it can provide relief and helps me feel better. Swimming can also reduce stress, make depression more bearable,and help me relax.
Secondly, swimming can help me maintain good health. It is one of the most active and effective ways to enhance my physically well-being.Furthmore, particpating in swimming activities aake it easier for me to make friends who share the same interested. It is enjoyable to contact with others throught it.
In conclusion, I love swimming because it brings numerous benefits to my life.

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优点：
1. 清楚地表达了主要内容要点。
2. 语法结构和词汇基本满足任务要求。
3. 文章结构清晰，有合理的段落分配。

不足之处及建议：
1. 拼写错误如“fell”应为“feel”，“physically well-being”应为“physical well-being”，“Furthmore”应为“Furthermore”，“particpating”应为“participating”，“interested”应为“interests”，“throught”应为“through”。
   建议：仔细检查拼写错误，避免因粗心导致的失误。

2. 表达略显重复，可以更加丰富。
   建议：尝试使用多样化的表达方式，避免重复使用相同词汇和结构。

3. 部分句子可以更流畅。
   例如：“Whenever I'm fell down, it can provide relief and helps me feel better.” 可以修改为 “Whenever I feel down, swimming provides relief and helps me feel better.”

通过以上建议修改，作文可以更加完善。