作品批改:给Tom写电邮分享暑假参加社区义工活动的事儿

Dear Tom,
    This is Li Ke from your friend, The reason that I am writing to you is because I became a voluteer my local community organizaion during the summer vacation.
    I became a voluteer to help the elderly. Besides of that ,here goes another thing that I think is important, which is that I hepled the to wash the clothes, do the housework,read of them and chat woth them. I could see ther happiness from their face when I was doing these things.And, doing such work makes our own life more colorful and meaningful,too. It`s really great that life of those in need can be little easier with the help if volunteers.
   How do you think of it? I am looking forward to receiving your reply.
                                                                                           Yours  LiKe

**评分：第三档 13-18分**

**优点：**
1. 基本完成了任务，提到了义工活动和帮助老人的关键内容。
2. 表达了一些活动的感受和意义。

**不足：**
1. 开头“from your friend”不恰当，多余，可以直接写“Hi, Tom”。
2. “voluteer”应为“volunteer”，拼写错误多次出现。
3. “voluteer my local community organizaion”应为“volunteer at my local community organization”。
4. “Besides of that”应为“Besides”或“In addition”。
5. “hepled the to wash the clothes”应为“helped them to wash clothes”。
6. “chat woth them”应为“chat with them”。
7. “ther happiness from their face”应为“their happiness on their faces”。
8. “life of those in need can be little easier”应为“lives of those in need can be a little easier”。

**建议：**
1. 注意拼写和基本语法的准确性。
2. 使用更自然的表达方式来改善句子结构。
3. 增加对活动感受的描述，使文章更加生动。