Live a Healthy Life

     It is well known that healthy life is very important. As a matter of fact, healthy life is good for us in many ways. Everyone hopes to live healthy in the world. As for me, healthy life means a balanced diet exercise and a sound sleep. Here are the things we should do.
     First of all, I think we should eat healthy food. Balanced diet can make us strong. In addition, doing exercise can help me relax and release/ reduce my pressure. Last but not least, I never stay up and always get up on time.

As far as I am concerned, healthy life is important, helpful and absolutely necessary.

Score: 19-24 (Second Tier)

Feedback:

1. Content and Structure:
   - The essay addresses the importance of a healthy lifestyle, mentioning key aspects such as balanced diet, exercise, and good sleep, which are essential points.
   - However, it lacks specific examples or detailed explanations that could enhance the reader's understanding and engagement with the topic.

2. Language Use:
   - Generally, the grammar and vocabulary used are suitable for the task.
   - Phrases like "doing exercise can help me relax and release/reduce my pressure" could be more precisely explained. Consider rephrasing to clarify the point, such as, "Exercise helps in stress reduction and relaxation."
   - The repeated use of "healthy life" could be varied by using synonyms or related phrases to enrich the text, such as "well-being" or "wholesome living."

3. Suggestions for Improvement:
   - Incorporate more examples or details, such as specific types of exercises or dietary habits, to provide a clearer picture of what constitutes a healthy lifestyle.
   - Improve coherence by connecting ideas smoothly, perhaps by explaining how each component (diet, exercise, sleep) contributes to overall health.
   - Consider expanding on why these elements are "important, helpful, and absolutely necessary" to strengthen your conclusion.

Overall, while the essay successfully communicates some basic ideas about maintaining a healthy lifestyle, more depth and variety in language would make it more compelling and informative.