Party

Dear Tom
      How are you?I am your best friend.I am writing to invite you to take part in Lucy's birthday party.It will take place at Lucy's home.It will began at 19:00 on sunday.You can make friends on the party.and it will enrich your social life.In addition,it can help you realize your self-worth and improve your expression ability.What's more,it can make you happy and help you learn many new things.The party will last for about three hours,form 7:00 p.m to 10:00 p.m.
      As a result,I really hope you can come and join us.Would you like to come I am looking forward to your early reply.I wish you and your family good health and happiness.

Thank you for your submission. Here is the evaluation and feedback based on the criteria provided:

**Score:** 13-18 (Third Tier)

**Evaluation:**
- **Content and Structure:** The letter includes most of the key points necessary for an invitation, such as the event details (date, time, place) and reasons for attending. However, there are some content issues like grammatical errors and unclear expression, which impact the overall clarity.
- **Language Use:** While the language is mostly understandable, there are several grammatical errors that might cause confusion. These include incorrect verb tense usage, punctuation issues, and some awkward expressions.

**Suggestions for Improvement:**
1. **Grammar and Sentence Structure:**
   - "I am your best friend" comes across as too direct and informal. Instead, consider starting with something like, "I hope this message finds you well."
   - "It will began" should be "It will begin".
   - "On sunday" should have "Sunday" capitalized.
   - "on the party" should be "at the party".

2. **Punctuation and Consistency:**
   - Maintain consistent capitalization, such as for days ("Sunday") and the beginning of new sentences.
   - There should be a question mark after "Would you like to come" as it is a question.

3. **Clarity and Expression:**
   - Instead of listing benefits in a rather promotional way, you could personalize why Tom, in particular, might enjoy the party.
   - Consider revising the sentence structure for smoothness. For example, "The party will last for about three hours, from 7:00 p.m. to 10:00 p.m." corrects the error "form 7:00 p.m."

4. **Cohesion and Flow:**
   - Ensure your writing has a natural flow. The transition from the invitation to the benefits of attending the party can feel abrupt.
   - Conclude with a more cohesive ending, perhaps by reiterating your anticipation of seeing Tom there.

By addressing these areas, the invitation can become more engaging and clearer for the reader.