My Hobby

It is well known that hobbies is very important in our lives.As a matter of fact,it helpus us happiness and healthy body by hobby.As for me,I prefer playing basketball to others hobbies.Here are the reasons:
First of all,some people like football and some people like reading books or writing letter.different hobbies bring different feeling.In addition,we are playing basketball,it not become friendship more famility,but also have many new friends.Last but not least,palying basketball bring healthy body to us,my body become strong.
As a result,as for as I am concerned my hobby is playing basketball.

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这篇作文基本完成了试题规定的任务，提及了关键内容要点，如“篮球作为爱好的理由”。但是，文章在语法、词汇和结构上存在较多错误，这些错误在一定程度上影响了文章的流畅性和理解。以下是一些具体的不足之处以及建议：

1. **语言表达不够准确**：
   - "hobbies is" 应改为 "hobbies are"。
   - "it helpus us happiness and healthy body by hobby" 是不清楚的句子，应改为 "they help us achieve happiness and maintain a healthy body through our hobbies"。
   - 建议用更清晰的句子结构来表达你的观点。

2. **拼写和单词使用错误**：
   - "helpus us" 应为 "help us"。
   - "palying" 应为 "playing"。
   - "famility" 可能是想说 "familiarity"，但上下文看似是为了说明友谊，应明确表述友谊增加，例如 "friendship becomes stronger"。

3. **语法和句子结构**：
   - "some people like football and some people like reading books or writing letter" 可以改为 "some people enjoy football, while others enjoy reading books or writing letters."
   - "we are playing basketball, it not become friendship more famility..." 整个句子结构不正确，应重写为 "when we play basketball, it not only strengthens our friendships but also allows us to make new friends."

4. **重复和冗长**：
   - “As for me,I prefer playing basketball to others hobbies” 太过简单直接，可以扩展一下原因，比如 “I find playing basketball more engaging than other hobbies because it keeps me active and allows me to socialize with friends.”

5. **逻辑连贯性和过渡**：
   - 在段落之间增加一些过渡句可以提高文章的连贯性。例如，在第一段之后，可加一句 "Let me explain why I feel this way" 来引导接下来的理由部分。

整体而言，该作文需要在语法、句子结构和逻辑连贯性方面进行加强。建议多加练习，注意细节，并尝试使用更加复杂的句子结构以提高书面表达能力。