My Career Plan

Nowadays,more and more people are talking about their children career.SO my mother and father care me work,and give me some time to make a career plan.Recently,I make a career plan,the reasons are as follows:
First of all,make a plan and go to finish.examlp,I want become theacher,so,I look for theacher material.Next,I don't know how to word,my mather use her free time talking me:to working is belssing,you should work.What's more,I hear my mother saying,I want to teacher very much.last but not least,become teacher not only helps my children understand this world but also bring happiness to them.

### Score: 7-12 分

### Evaluation:
This essay falls into the fourth档次（7-12 分），因为它完成了一部分试题规定的任务，但有明显问题。

### Content and Organization:
- The essay addresses the topic of a career plan and mentions some related points but lacks clear organization and coherence.
- It introduces the idea of having a career plan and gives some reasons for wanting to become a teacher. However, these ideas are not well-developed or clearly connected.
  
### Language:
- The language is basic with numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
- Vocabulary is limited and repetitive.
- The incorrect use of words (e.g., "examlp" instead of "example") and grammar mistakes (e.g., "care me work" instead of "care about my work") hinder understanding.

### Specific Issues:
1. **Grammar and Syntax**:
   - Incorrect sentence structure: "My mother and father care me work" should be "My mother and father care about my career."
   - Missing articles and prepositions: "theacher" should be "a teacher," "word" should be "work," "theacher material" should be "teaching materials."
   
2. **Spelling and Punctuation**:
   - "examlp" should be "example."
   - "SO" should be "so."
   - Always use a space after punctuation marks.

3. **Clarity and Coherence**:
   - Sentences are often unclear: "use her free time talking me: to working is belssing" could be revised to "uses her free time to talk to me, saying that working is a blessing."
   - Ideas should be presented in a more logical order with clear transitions.

### Revised Version:
My Career Plan

Nowadays, more and more people are talking about their children's careers. So, my mother and father are concerned about my future work and have given me some time to make a career plan. Recently, I made a career plan, and the reasons are as follows:

First of all, making a plan helps you achieve your goals. For example, I want to become a teacher, so I look for teaching materials to prepare myself. Next, I was unsure about my future work, but my mother uses her free time to talk to me and says, "Working is a blessing; you should work hard." Moreover, my mother's words inspire me, and I really want to become a teacher. Last but not least, becoming a teacher not only helps my students understand the world but also brings happiness to both them and me.

With this career plan, I hope to achieve my dream of becoming a teacher and making a difference in the lives of many children.