My Hobby

Nowadays,more and more people talking about their are bobbies.
So,I have many hobbies too.such ping-pong,basketball and football and reading books but I like reading books very much than others hobbies.
The reasons as the follow:
Firstly,between I was childhood,I don't know many words and don't underestand,but my mother tolk me reading books that can helpful underestand,so she reading books towards me very day.
Next,after dinner,she used free time to reading books with me ,when I grew up,I often teach my boy to reading books very daily.what's more,it is not only help me to understand in the world,but also it help my family bring happiness.So I like reading bookds.

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
• 语言运用较为准确、恰当
  

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
• 语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解
  

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

• 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
• 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
• 存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解
  

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

• 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇单调。
• 语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解
  

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

• 明显遗漏内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇极单调
• 语言错误很多，严重影响理解
  

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

这篇作文的评分建议如下：

### 总体印象
这篇作文提到了自己的兴趣爱好并详细描述了为什么喜欢阅读书籍。然而，文章存在较多的语法错误和拼写错误，部分句子结构不清楚，影响了理解。

### 评分：第四档（7-12分）
#### 理由：
1. **内容要点**：基本完成了试题规定的任务，但有些内容表达不够清晰。
2. **语法结构和词汇**：用词和语法结构非常基础，错误较多。
3. **语言错误**：语言错误较多，一些错误影响理解。

### 具体修改建议：
1. **开头和第一段**：
   - 原句："Nowadays,more and more people talking about their are bobbies."
   - 修改： "Nowadays, more and more people are talking about their hobbies."

2. **连接过渡**：
   - 原句："So,I have many hobbies too.such ping-pong,basketball and football and reading books..."
   - 修改："I have many hobbies too, such as playing ping-pong, basketball, football, and reading books..."

3. **比较级使用**：
   - 原句："but I like reading books very much than others hobbies."
   - 修改："but I like reading books much more than other hobbies."

4. **语法与拼写**：
   - 原句："The reasons as the follow:
     - Firstly,between I was childhood,I don't know many words and don't underestand,but my mother tolk me reading books that can helpful underestand,so she reading books towards me very day."
   - 修改："The reasons are as follows:
     - Firstly, when I was a child, I didn't know many words and didn't understand much. But my mother told me that reading books could help me understand better. So she read books to me every day."

5. **续写**：
   - 原句："Next,after dinner,she used free time to reading books with me ,when I grew up,I often teach my boy to reading books very daily.what's more,it is not only help me to understand in the world,but also it help my family bring happiness.So I like reading bookds."
   - 修改："Next, after dinner, she used her free time to read books with me. When I grew up, I often read books with my child every day. Furthermore, it not only helps me understand the world better but also brings happiness to my family. Therefore, I like reading books."

### 完整修改后的版本：

1. My Hobby
   
2. 
   
3. Nowadays, more and more people are talking about their hobbies. I have many hobbies too, such as playing ping-pong, basketball, football, and reading books, but I like reading books much more than other hobbies. The reasons are as follows:
   
4. 
   
5. Firstly, when I was a child, I didn't know many words and didn't understand much. But my mother told me that reading books could help me understand better. So she read books to me every day. After dinner, she used her free time to read books with me. As I grew up, I often read books with my child every day. Furthermore, it not only helps me understand the world better but also brings happiness to my family. Therefore, I like reading books.

复制代码

希望这些修改建议对你有所帮助。继续加油！