My Favorite Job

Well-know,many people talking about that job if you favorite.My favorite job is teacher than others.I think you ask me "WHY".the list as follows:First ,theacher have many holiday,when ,i WAS little boy .I seen my mother go to school very day ,but she has not go th school on the on one month.i don't know,why my mother don't to go.she tall me,theacher have many holiday ,so I like.Second,when my children don't understand word,I can teach thier understand word well.So,My favoreite job is theacher,it not only help children understand word but also bring happiness.
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请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
• 语言运用较为准确、恰当
  

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

• 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
• 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
• 语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解
  

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

• 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
• 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
• 存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解
  

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

• 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇单调。
• 语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解
  

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

• 明显遗漏内容要点
• 语法结构和词汇极单调
• 语言错误很多，严重影响理解
  

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

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### 作文评分与改进意见

#### 原始作文：

1. My Favorite Job
   
2. Well-know,many people talking about that job if you favorite.My favorite job is teacher than others.I think you ask me "WHY".the list as follows:First ,theacher have many holiday,when ,i WAS little boy  .I seen my mother go to school very day ,but she has not go th school on the on one month.i don't know,why my mother don't to go.she tall me,theacher have many holiday ,so I like.Second,when my children don't understand word,I can teach thier understand word well.So,My favoreite job is theacher,it not only help children understand word but also bring happiness.

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#### 改进后的作文：

1. My Favorite Job
   
2. As we all know, many people talk about their favorite jobs. My favorite job is being a teacher. You might ask me "WHY". Here is the list of reasons: First, teachers have many holidays. When I was a little boy, I saw my mother go to school every day, but she did not go to school for one month. I didn't understand why my mother didn't go, but she told me that teachers have many holidays, so I liked it. Second, when my children don't understand a word, I can teach them to understand it well. So, my favorite job is being a teacher. It not only helps children understand words but also brings happiness.

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#### 打分与建议：
**总分：13-18分（第三档）**

**内容要点：**
- 提及了关键内容要点（例如老师的假期和帮助孩子理解单词）。
- 有时语句不够清晰，但能传达基本意思。

**语法和词汇：**
- 存在多处语法错误和拼写错误，例如"theacher"应该是"teacher"、“favourit”应该是“favorite”等。
- 词汇使用单调，有些地方的措辞需要调整，如“many holiday”应为“many holidays”。

**语言运用：**
- 语言错误较多，但基本不影响理解。
- 部分句子结构不合理，需调整整体句子的流畅度。

**具体建议：**
1. **拼写和标点符号**：注意单词拼写和标点符号的正确使用。例如：
    - "Well-know," 应改为 "As we all know,"
    - "theacher" 应改为 "teacher"
2. **语法**：改善语法结构，确保句子完整。例如：
    - "First ,theacher have many holiday" 应改为 "First, teachers have many holidays"
3. **条理性和逻辑性**：将理由清晰地列出来，使文章更具条理，例如：
    - "Here is the list of reasons:" 这种引导型的句子可以帮助读者更好地理解作者的思路。
4. **内容丰富性**：可以来补充一些细节以增强文章的说服力。例如：
    - 为什么假期对你很重要？你在假期中做了哪些有意义的事情？

通过以上调整和改进，这篇作文会更加清晰流畅，表达也会更准确到位。