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minling 发表于 2024-3-24 21:11 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
作文内容: Watching Movies At Home Or In A Cinena
    Nowadays , there is a growing concern over the issue of watching movies at home or in a cihema.
    Some People hold the view that watching movies at home is better than watching movies in a cinema, because watching movies at home is cheaper and covenient ·  It helps us to enjoy same movies at lower prices.While other people agrue  that Watching  movies in a cinema is better t than watching movies at home, because watching movies in a cinema is more comfortable and more romantic, it  helps us to be closer with our friends.
   In conclusion, I agree that both  aspeats should be considented when talking watching movies at  home or in a cinema.   However, I prefer watching movies at home rather than watching movies in a cinema. Because I  like to enjoy same movies at lower prices.



请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分,并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分,按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分,而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时,先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次,然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数,最后给分应避免分数趋中现象,即不能只给中间档次的分数,该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分),该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时,应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑,英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认,以致影响交际,或字数明显少于要求,将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分:圆满完成了试题规定的任务

  • 清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
  • 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
  • 语言运用较为准确、恰当

第二档    19-24分:完成了试题规定的任务

  • 清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
  • 运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
  • 语言运用基本正确,虽有小错,但不影响理解

第三档    13-18分:基本完成了试题规定的任务

  • 提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
  • 运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
  • 存在一些语言错误,但基本不影响理解

第四档    7-12分:完成了一部分试题规定的任务

  • 遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
  • 语法结构和词汇单调。
  • 语言错误较多,部分错误影响理解

第五档1-6分:未完成试题规定的任务

  • 明显遗漏内容要点
  • 语法结构和词汇极单调
  • 语言错误很多,严重影响理解

0分:所传达的信息或所用语言太少,无法评价;所写内容与题目要求完全无关



王艳 发表于 2024-3-24 21:11 | 显示全部楼层
针对这篇作文的评分如下:

内容要点:该作文涉及到了关于在家观看电影和在电影院观看电影的讨论,但内容较为简单,未展开深入讨论。提到了一些观点,但没有提供详细的论据或例子支撑。部分内容表述不够清晰。得分13-18分。

篇章结构:整体结构比较松散,缺乏逻辑性和连贯性。没有明确的引言和结论部分,段落之间缺乏过渡。得分7-12分。

语言运用:语言表达较为简单,存在一些重复使用、词汇选择不够丰富的问题。句子结构基本正确,但有一些语法错误,影响了整体表达的流畅性。得分7-12分。

总体评价:根据上述的评分标准,将该作文划分为第四档,得分为8-9分。建议在以后的写作中注意扩展观点,提供更多具体例子和论据来支持观点,同时增强段落之间的连接,使文章结构更加清晰和连贯。此外,注意语法和词汇的准确性,避免重复使用和简单句式。
minling楼主 发表于 2024-3-24 21:19 | 显示全部楼层
能提供一篇范文吗
王艳 发表于 2024-3-24 21:19 | 显示全部楼层
minling 发表于 2024-03-24 21:19
能提供一篇范文吗


当然,请看以下范文:

Watching Movies At Home Or In A Cinema

In today's society, the debate over whether to watch movies at home or in a cinema is ongoing. While some people prefer the convenience and cost-effectiveness of watching movies at home, others argue that the experience of watching a movie in a cinema is unmatched in terms of comfort and atmosphere.

Those who advocate for watching movies at home often point out the advantages of cost savings and convenience. With the availability of streaming services and online platforms, movie lovers can enjoy a wide range of films at their fingertips without having to leave the comfort of their homes. Additionally, watching movies at home allows for flexibility in terms of timing and viewing choices, making it a popular option for many.

On the other hand, supporters of watching movies in a cinema emphasize the unique experience it offers. Going to a cinema provides an immersive environment with large screens, surround sound, and comfortable seating, creating a cinematic experience that cannot be replicated at home. Furthermore, the communal aspect of watching a movie in a cinema, surrounded by fellow audience members, adds to the overall enjoyment and excitement of the viewing experience.

In conclusion, both watching movies at home and in a cinema have their own advantages and appeal to different preferences. While watching movies at home may be more convenient and cost-effective, watching movies in a cinema offers a unique and immersive experience that many movie enthusiasts appreciate. Ultimately, the choice between watching movies at home or in a cinema depends on individual preferences and the kind of experience one seeks when enjoying a film.

这篇范文较好地展开了讨论,在各自观点中提供了具体的论据和例子。同时,结构清晰,段落间有连贯性,语言运用较为准确和生动。希望这篇范文可以帮助你更好地理解如何写作有关观看电影的议论文。
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