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E-books or Paper Books?
There is a long running debate on the subject of e-books or paper books . As the old saying goes,
every coin has two sides . It goes without saying that people from different
backgrounds may have divergent attitudes towards it.
Most people think that e-books are better than paper books. The reason they give is that e-books are more convenient. So it goes without saying that their choice is not in doubt. The people, however, were divided in their opinion of the matter. Some people take the view that paper books are better than e-books. What is the opinion of this group? They firmly believe that paper books are more meaningful.
For my part, I am firmly of the opinion thatt e-books are better than paper books. It is not only because  e-books are more convenient, but also because more comfortable. Only then will we finally be able to live up to our own preferences.

请按照作文类型以及评分标准对上面的作文进行打分，并指出不足

1)评分原则

本题总分为30分，按5个档次评分。

阅卷人应就总体印象给分，而不是按照语言错误的数量扣分。

评分时，先根据文章的内容要点、篇章结构和语言运用初步确定其所属的档次，然后依照该档次的具体要求酌情增减分数，最后给分应避免分数趋中现象，即不能只给中间档次的分数，该给高分时就应给高分(包含满分)，该给低分时就应给低分(包含0分)。

拼写和标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时，应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑，英式、美式拼写及用法均可接受。

如书写较差难以辨认，以致影响交际，或字数明显少于要求，将分数降低一个档次

2)评分标准

第一档    25-30分：圆满完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部内容要点。
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务要求
语言运用较为准确、恰当

第二档    19-24分：完成了试题规定的任务

清楚地表达了全部或关键内容要点
运用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的基本要求
语言运用基本正确，虽有小错，但不影响理解

第三档    13-18分：基本完成了试题规定的任务

提及了关键内容要点(可能漏掉了个别内容)
运用的语法结构和词汇满足任务的最低要求
存在一些语言错误，但基本不影响理解

第四档    7-12分：完成了一部分试题规定的任务

遗漏或未能清楚表达内容要点
语法结构和词汇单调。
语言错误较多，部分错误影响理解

第五档1-6分：未完成试题规定的任务

明显遗漏内容要点
语法结构和词汇极单调
语言错误很多，严重影响理解

0分：所传达的信息或所用语言太少，无法评价；所写内容与题目要求完全无关

评分：第三档 13-18分

总体印象：文章意思基本上能够理解，但存在一些问题。内容要点不是非常清楚地表达出来，语言运用和结构方面还有一些错误，影响了阅读的流畅性。

不足之处：
1. 缺乏内容要点的清晰表达。文章中提到了e-books和paper books的优劣，并且提到了一些人的观点，但没有对这些观点进行详细的说明和论证。
2. 句子结构复杂度不够。文章中的句子结构相对简单，缺乏变化和连贯性。
3. 语法错误较多。文章中存在一些语法错误，如句子缺乏主谓一致、时态错误等。
4. 表达方式不够准确。文章中的表达方式比较模糊，有时候需要解读才能理解作者的意思。

改进建议：
1. 清晰地表达内容要点。在每个观点后面加上具体的论据和例子，以增强论证的力度。
2. 提高句子结构复杂度。尝试使用不同的句型和连接词，以使文章更加连贯和流畅。
3. 注意语法准确性。细心检查文章中的语法错误，特别是主谓一致和时态等方面的错误。
4. 使用准确的表达方式。注意用词的准确性和清晰度，避免模糊和含糊不清的表达。

例子改写：
E-books vs Paper Books: Which is Better?

The debate on whether e-books or paper books are superior has been ongoing for quite some time. While there are valid arguments on both sides of the argument, it is important to consider the advantages and disadvantages of each format.

Proponents of e-books often argue that they are more convenient. With just a few clicks, one can access a vast library of books without leaving the comfort of their home. Furthermore, e-books are lightweight and portable, allowing readers to carry multiple books wherever they go. This convenience factor has undoubtedly contributed to the growing popularity of e-books.

On the other hand, some individuals believe that paper books hold more meaning. The tangible experience of holding a physical book, flipping through its pages, and even smelling the ink, evokes a sense of nostalgia and connection to the written word. For these readers, the act of reading is not just about consuming information, but also about appreciating the artistry and craftsmanship of a well-designed book.

In my opinion, e-books have the edge over paper books. Not only are they more convenient in terms of accessibility and portability, but they also offer additional features such as adjustable font sizes, search functions, and the ability to highlight and make notes. These digital enhancements provide a more personalized and interactive reading experience, making it easier for readers to engage with the content.

In conclusion, the choice between e-books and paper books ultimately depends on personal preferences and individual reading habits. While paper books may have their charm, the convenience and added features of e-books make them a preferred choice for many readers. Regardless of the format, what matters most is that people continue to read and enjoy the benefits of literature.