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Protect Environment
Recently, more and more people are talking about how to protect the environment. The Earth is our mother and our home for survival. With the improvement of our living standards, the environment is being unknowingly destroyed.From my perspective,It is totally undoubted that protecting the environment is the responsibility of everyone .The reasion why i believe so are listed as blow.
The first point that i want to mention is that we should have low-carbon lifestyle, We can drive less,walk more or ride bicycles,and that is because it can reduce the pollution of the atmosphere and we can have a fresh air in the future.What is more it is easier for us to understand that we should save water and  protect the existing water resources and develop new ones,Which is because water is rather limited on the earth and clean water can reduce the accurrence of disease.
From what I mention above,We can easily come to the conclusion that protecting the environment is the responsibility of everyone ,After all,wo should have low-carbon lifestyle ,save water and protect water that can let our home have a fresh air and clean water.

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Protect Environment

Recently, more and more people are talking about how to protect the environment. The Earth is our mother and our home for survival. With the improvement of our living standards, the environment is being unknowingly destroyed. From my perspective, it is totally undoubted that protecting the environment is the responsibility of everyone. The reason why I believe so is listed as below.

The first point that I want to mention is that we should have a low-carbon lifestyle. We can drive less, walk more or ride bicycles, and that is because it can reduce the pollution of the atmosphere and we can have fresh air in the future. What is more, it is easier for us to understand that we should save water and protect the existing water resources and develop new ones. This is because water is rather limited on the earth and clean water can reduce the occurrence of disease.

From what I mentioned above, we can easily come to the conclusion that protecting the environment is the responsibility of everyone. After all, we should have a low-carbon lifestyle, save water, and protect water resources, which can let our home have fresh air and clean water.

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评语：这篇文章对保护环境的观点进行了较为清晰的陈述，但结构上还有一些不足。首先，文章未能提供明确的开头和结尾，没有引起读者的兴趣和总结主要观点。其次，虽然文章列举了两个具体的措施来保护环境，但缺乏扩展和深入论证。建议在每个观点后面加上相应的例子或实证数据来支持观点。此外，文章中还有一些语法错误和表达不够准确的地方，建议在写作过程中多加注意。